The Potter Sue of the Day

Featuring your Mary-Sues, one fic at a time!

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Since Pottersues is getting a lot of new minions I decided it was time to draw up the basic rules for this journal that have pretty much gone unsaid among the minions. I'll also note here that there have been four Pottersues so far since the journal was started.

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4428: Shipped away - Vivian Hunter
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I’ve been dealing with a family issue which should hopefully be under control.

Title: Shipped away
Perpetrator:
blodrose (The writer is from Sweden)
Sue-O-Meter: Awful
Cover/Banner Art: The cover is a picture of someone’s head from the back. It looks like a female and the hair is blond done up into a braid.
Summary:Vivian Hunter, a half blood, have been a captive of Voldemort for 3 years, when things suddenly change and she find herself in another universe. Rated T for violens and language.
Full Name: Vivian Hunter
Species: She’s a multi-fandom sue.
Hair:
Eyes:
Markings: For some reason, “there on her arm was the dark mark in red”. Last time I checked, the Dark Mark was black but also used on Death Eaters, not the captives.
Possessions: A very annoying backstory for getting from one fandom to another.
Connection to Canon: We get two chapters of torture because Voldemort wants George to join him and is using her to get to him. At the end, she ends up falling into the world of The 100. The third chapter is about her falling into fandom and consists of three paragraphs. She then meets the characters from the other world. She spends the fifth chapter worrying about not being able to perform wandless magic because “wandless magic was something only the most skilled witches and wizards could do.” The characters are also talking about killing her.
Origin: Something bad happens in one fandom so they end up in another. This plot is bad enough when done to a canon character who’s already
Special Abilities:

Notes: What’s the point of this?

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4227: Black and White - Andrew Raymond George/Potter and Harry Potter
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Title: Black and White
Perpetrator:
Zakumi122
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: Their avatar are a pair of Anime characters, yet I am not sure which characters they are as the picture is a bit dark. I thought one was Soifon from Bleach, yet I’m not sure of who the second would be.
Summary:Harry had grown up knowing Andrew is his brother, no matter what people kept saying. One day they find out they're wizards and not only that but they're both famous. Only one problem the wizarding world expect two White heros to rise. How will they react to a Black hero? rated T for discrimination and language. Harry/Tonks, Hermione/OC v.s Ron. BOOK 3 NOW UP!”
Full Name: Andrew Raymond George/Potter and Harry Potter, by extention
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4226: The Triplets of Hogwarts - Cliodhna and her brothers
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Title: The Triplets of Hogwarts
Perpetrator:
Sergeant Wellington
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: None
Summary:The Quick triplets are the only triplets in Hogwarts history, are best friends with the Weasleys & the Diggorys, & are way too good at Quidditch. Cliodhna sometimes feels like the odd person out when everyone comments on her being a girl, but she's determined to show them. Quidditch, friendship, and school are the most important things! AU AU! [CD/OC (CQ), HP/GW, HG/FW, etc.]
Full Name: Cliodhna “Klee, at least according to the reviews” Quick, plus Ben and Jack “Jackie” Quick
Species: They’re triplets. Their parents are Angus and Caterine Quick
Hair: Her is a quote from chapter two. “Cedric walked a half step behind his mother, nervous about meeting these neighbors. He became very confused when his eyes settled on the three children who were all similar heights and had varying shades of blonde hair.” There is nothing confusing about that!
Eyes: Jack’s eyes are “golden-brown”. One of the annoying things in chapter one is how the triplets having different eye colors is pointed out. “Cliodhna smiled at the younger boy who was nearly their height,” Just another way we’re different.” Please, writers, when giving your characters special traits, don’t throw it in your readers faces! Her eyes though turn out to be hazel. Funny how the first image which popped into my head wasn’t the “blue hazel”, but the “golden-brown” hazel. In fact, Ben’s are also described as “golden-brown” in chapter one.
Markings: Nothing specific.
Possessions: I believe they received brooms at a very young age.
Connection to Canon: The first chapter involves the annoying Cliodhna moving in near the Weasley family with her mother, father and triplet brothers I suspect only exist to make her super special. Scratch that. The comment regarding their eyes in chapter three confirms it, but I find myself more annoyed than I thought I would be with this character, and we’re not even into the first chapter. (The first chapter of twenty-eight mind you, with 273,628 words.) Later on, they also talk about celebrating half-birthdays. (…) “’I like the Quicks,” Bill told his brother as they flew lazily high above the field, ‘it’s good for the others to know non-Weasley children.’” WTF! We’re not even out of the first chapter, and the “we’re so special” isn’t slowing down! Cedric moves in during chapter two, but the entire thing felt “anticlimactic”. I’m also bothered with this “everybody moving in” plotline. I also just realized the writer is naming their chapters via Roman numerals. Chapter three is best summed up as being about how much Cliodhna loves her perfect family, but has the perfect life with perfect friends. WTF! In chapter four, “’Take care of your brothers,” Angus’ hands were on her shoulders, his green eyes peering into her hazel ones. ‘Make sure Jack makes friends and make sure Ben doesn’t become a prat.” As suspected, they don’t have any true role in the story beyond making their sister super special. Cedric also has to explain what triplets are in this chapter. Looking at chapter five, the story is “sue-what-plot”.
Origin: I wonder if the writer thought something along these lines. “There are already a bunch of twins at Hogwarts. As such, to make my characters unique, they need to be triplets.” I feel this is confirmed as I reread the summary and notice the first line. I’m not even into the first chapter, and the story is screaming toxic rating wise. I’d like to say the writer might surprise me, but I doubt this story will rank lower than an awful.
Special Abilities: Just from the summary, we find out they “are way too good at Quidditch.” I’m also left believing what I believe is the main OC, Cliodhna, is attempting to show people girls can do what the boys can. I’m honestly tired of that plotline, but writers who honestly think being a tomboy is actually something that makes the character unique. Actually, with just the summary, I see the writer already tacking on traits just to make their OC special. I also just reread the summary. They’re apparently the “only triplets in Hogwarts history”. I found out from the reviews that Ben is gay. Something tells me that’s another thing tacked on to be “special”.

Notes: When someone says they can’t believe a story doesn’t have more reviews, do you believe them? I see people saying that so many times on poorly written stories rather than the good ones, so how can you tell if the reader knows what they’re talking about?

Because according to one reader, “this is a great coming of age story”, yet doesn’t have any form of conflict one would expect of an actual coming of age story. If someone recommended this as a great coming of age fanfic, I’d find myself majorly disapointed.

Sample:

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4225: Magic in the Moonlight - Lyra Sanquine
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Title: Magic in the Moonlight
Perpetrator:
Lady Nightlord
Sue-O-Meter: Awful
Cover/Banner Art:
Summary:Three has always been a magical number and at Hogwarts even more. Before the famous trio there was another whose story carried on through everything; a tale of friendship, love and pain that stood the test of time. During school friendship is everything and afterwards things always get more complicated. Especially when you're friends with Severus Snape...well, sort of.
Full Name: Lyra Sanquine
Species: She’s a relationship sue.
Hair: Her hair is raven colored. We also hear that “her long black hair tied back from her face but for loose strands that hung either side.”
Eyes: Her eyes are grey.
Markings: So far, nothing specific.
Possessions: Nothing of interest.
Connection to Canon: The first chapter involves the three meeting at Kings Cross. For some reason she’s able to worm her way into Lily and Severus’ inner circle. I guess there is an explanation given by the Sue. “Both magical… but don’t worry I’m not as…egocentric as some other purebloods… can we still be friends?” this results in out of character blushing from Severus Snape despite the fact he likes Lily. She of course gets sorted into Gryffindor. Oh, and she used to be James’ friend, but is no longer so because he picked on Snape. I found the second chapter a tad confusing. We get the line, “despite a few problems concerning James and his little group, her beliefs turning out to be correct, the three had pulled through into their third year with little hassle.” The chapter then involves the three talking. We find out she’s been living on her own. (I don’t buy this. Chapter three is about her seeing things in the crystal ball. Later James and Severus get in trouble later on for dueling. Even though Slughorn has a party in chapter five, the story is sue-what-plot.
Origin: The writer decided to randomly dumb their OC into the canon material without thinking how said OC fits in. Am I the only person who is bothered by one of the descriptions of Kings Cross being “the smell of coffee”.
Special Abilities: She’s another character who’s story went untold. She’s also another friend of Snape, despite the fact Lily being his only friend plays an important role in regard to his background story. Snape is also instantly crushing on her as soon as they meet. (This writer completely misses the importance of Snape’s infatuation with Lily, don’t they?)

Notes: What stood out regarding the summary on this one is the way the writer plays up the importance of the characters friendship in regards to a character who had only one friend. The story has forty-one chapters and over a hundred words. There are so far only four reviews. I wonder if the sue-what-plot is at fault.

Sample:

Chapter One

Kings Cross was by far one of the busiest places around London with people coming and going faster than you could count them. New and shiny trains lined up the platforms, sirens and flashing signs alerting passengers to the departure times while a big clock steadily clicked closer to eleven o'clock. With fifteen minutes to go most were scrambling to their destinations. The smell of coffee as hurried businessmen ran past, the sound of crying children being tugged along by weary parents, the feel of people brushing past on the crowded platforms all added to the organised chaos of the daily commute. All but one. A small, young girl stood staring at the pillar between platform nine and ten. No one really noticed the dark haired girl, her long black hair tied back from her face but for loose strands that hung either side, grey eyes never leaving the stonework before her despite the annoyed trills of a grey owl in its cage, resting atop her school trunk.

She wasn't one of the first people to have her predicament and she wouldn't be the last either. It would happen every year on that same day between ten and eleven, there was always some child stood staring at the pillar as if waiting for it to move for them. The only difference being that usually they had someone accompanying them. Sighing, the girl drummed her fingers worriedly on the bar of her cart wondering just what to do with herself when she suddenly heard someone coming closer.

"Come on Sev! We're going to be late and miss the Hogwarts Express!"

Jumping at the mentioning of the wizarding school she turned to see two children her own age heading her way with their own carts. One was a young, auburn haired girl with kind emerald eyes, dressed smartly in a simple summer dress and looking positively ecstatic as she hurriedly pushed her cart towards the platform. Beside her was a more sombre character, a young boy with dark hair that was somewhat greasy, dark eyes looking down at the ground before sideways at his friend warmly. A strange combination between the bouncy and kind looking girl and stiff, awkward looking boy.

"It's fine Lily, we still have ten minutes."

Both of them were accompanied by a woman of around average height but she looked rather thin and if anything, frail, her long black hair falling lankly around her pale face not unlike - she guessed - her son's. The third addition walked slowly behind the children looking as if she wished to be elsewhere.

The girl scoffed lightly but smiled back at him, "I'm just glad you know how to get onto the platform! Oh," only now did the auburn haired girl notice the girl stood before the pillar, not that you couldn't miss the silent look of desperation on her face, "are you going to Hogwarts too?"

Nodding, the raven haired girl smiled sheepishly, "yeah but I'm not sure how to erm...you know...get through."

"Aren't your parents here?" the bubbly girl asked curiously, answered by a shake of the head, "oh, well it's alright Mrs Snape is going to show us, you want to come along if it's okay with her, I'm Lily Evans by the way."

"Lyra Sanguine," she shook the girl's hand before looking at the boy, still smiling at him despite the slight frown on his face.
 

4224: Painting It, Black - Persephone Black
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Title: Painting It, Black
Perpetrator:
QueenErynn
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: The cover art is of a girl in a strapless black top with a bunch of tattoos and a short blonde haircut.
Summary:Persephone Black approached 12 Grimmauld place with her purchases from Diagon Alley. She wore her honey blond hair in a tight neat bun, and her kitten heels clicked against the cobblestone. Two men stood outside of the house's magical entrance. "Miss Black... your grandmother has passed." The wizard robed in purple started. A wave of utter relief washed over her.
Full Name: Persephone Black
Species: Sirius’ daughter
Hair: I believe she has blonde hair.
Eyes: Don’t’ know. Haven’t caught anything as I read through.
Markings:  Nothing specific…
Possessions: She has a wand which is “white ash 8 inch dragon heartstring wand.” She also “poured over a leather journal inscribed ‘to Songbird from Padfoot, 1977’. Each page was absolutely filled with beautifully penned poems, notes, and personal entries. Her favorite pages were of the hand drawn portraits spread throughout the book. Her favorite was labeled ‘Padfoot’ a young man with wild hair, a mischievous grin, yet kind eyes.” She lives at Grimmauld.
Connection to Canon: Persephone is currently being raised by Kreature. She is now off to get her school supplies. This takes place during year three, as she sees a dog looking at her. Narcissa meets her at the train, but then she’s rushed through the sorting in the very first chapter. She goes into Gryffindor, but now that I think about it that’s actually a flash back. She’s threatened by her grandmother about becoming a Gryffindor. The school helped her hide the fact she’d been sorted into Gryffindor, only for this to be ruined by the Malfoy family. She also finds out her grandmother has passed when she gets back from shopping for school supplies. (Yes, this is confusing. I thought Kreature was raising her.) Second chapter she finds herself in Kingsley’s care. Third, she is in Remus care and apparently we’re to believe Remus was also in love with Persephone’s mother. Chapter four – she’s introduced to Harry, but of course nobody but Hermione knows her despite the fact she was in potions and charms the last year, yet should have been in every single class because they don’t “change” the house someone gets sorted in, and classes are gone to based on which class your in. Chapter five is the incident with Buckbeak and her getting to fly. Chapter six involves transfiguration, the characters rambling and her having nightmares for some reason. Chapter seven is the Bogart. Apparently she is afraid of her adult self. (I am NOT amused.) In chapter eight we find out she is in fifth year with McGonagall, but they convince her to do some Quidditch stuff. (Sorry, but no. If students could skip grades like that, Hermione would have.) She is interested in George. (I guess because he’s the twin that doesn’t die? Anybody else notice people now pick a twin to pair their character up with?) Anyway, I’ve had enough with the woe is me and special treatment the Sue is getting, but there is actually currently forty-one-chapters. I’ve not even gotten a forth of the way through. Also, according to one reader, the writer got sixteen chapters done in less than a month. If the story isn’t following the plot from the books, there is no plot. Apparently for a period of the time she lives with the Malfoy family.
Origin: She is Sirius’ daughter who was raised by Mistress Black. She prefers the Mistress Black in painting format. In chapter three we find out her mother was an American named Robin.
Special Abilities: I’ll start off with the fact I find the treatment of Persephone’s life gag inducing. She’s also disrupting a ton of Harry Potter canon by her mere existence. Which, going AU isn’t a bad thing. It’s the fact this is thrown together. She also has no fatal flaws. She has these dreams, which apparently – according to one review – are visions.

Notes: It’s probably not a good thing when the summary introduces the character and what they look like rather than the actual story. I’m not sure what bothers me more: the paragraph formatting, or that with just the summary and first paragraph according to the writer’s current formatting we are being waxed poetry regarding how perfect everything is. That is, perfect except for the needed drama in the Sue’s life.

Sample:

Sugary sweet isn't really fun to read as we know life isn't perfect.Collapse )ishments. She only hoped the cretin would keep this to himself and she wouldn't suffer anything in the morning.

When dawn broke through the dusty moth eaten curtains of her room Persephone vaulted from her bed and readied herself for breakfast with her caretaker. The vanity mirror her grey eyes reflecting back in weariness. She brushed her honey locks into a tight high bun after pulling on a long black skirt and a green blouse. A slytherin banner hung over her dresser and it made her smirk before leaving the room to join her grandmother for breakfast in the woman's room. Walburga Black laid propped up against a mass of feather pillows; her silver locks in a tidy bun, and the disappointed expression on her face was always there.


"Good morning Grandmother." Persephone quietly greeted before taking the chair next to the bed. Walburga didn't reply but merely reached for her wand on the bedside table. Persephone flinched gripping her hands onto her knees. Inwardly she cursed the house-elf. When no pain came she looked up to see an envelope floating into her grandmother's hand.
"You are to only withdraw enough for your school supplies. No extras and return the key to Kreature upon your return home or else."


"Y-yes ma'am." She held out her hand for the Black family vaullt key. They ate Kreature's oatmeal in silence.
 

4223: Falling for Fawley - Aurelia Fawley
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Title: Falling for Fawley
Perpetrator:
standoutme
Sue-O-Meter: Awful
Cover/Banner Art: The picture is of a very pretty blonde haired girl
Summary:Aurelia had been falling for James Potter long before he crashed into her that Wednesday morning in April. The problem was, he was madly in love with someone else. Either way, her elitist pureblood family would never approve. And oh, she might as well be invisible; particularly to tall, handsome boys with messy dark hair. (James x OC)
Full Name: Aurelia Fawley
Species: We’re supposed to believe she’s a wallflower, but instead she’s an annoying fangirl.
Hair: See markings…
Eyes: See markings…
Markings:Aurelia was just as well as invisible, particularly to boys. Her complexion was so fair it freckled at the first glimpse of sun in spring, and her white blonde hair fell flat over her shoulders, without the slightest wave or sign of life in it. To her dismay, she had inherited her mother’s skinny form, and her dull greyish blue eyes. And if you ever took the time to really look at her, you would see a Malfoy rather than a Fawley. Thankfully, no one ever did seem to take that close of a look. Perhaps that was because her eyes were always glued to the floor, or because her nose was struck to a book. Perhaps it was because she didn’t want to be seen, because she’d much rather be invisible than being mocked, or pursued by one of those smug Slytherin boys.
Possessions: Nothing specific.
Connection to Canon: She bumps into James, and proceeds to fawn over “Lia” and she is freaking out because he gave her a pet name, but also whining about wanting a friendship like James and his friends.
Origin:This story has been on my mind for years, and I was finally excited about writing down. I’ve given so much thought to my OC, and I really hope you’ll like this!
Special Abilities: We’re supposed to believe she’s not pretty, which is why she hides her nose in a book. Thinking she’d be mocked is not the same as actually being mocked.

Notes: One of the readers says, “I don’t see too many of these kinds of stories very often. Great first chapter and can’t wait to see the rest! :)” Another says, “Mmm interesting. I have never read an story with this kind of plotline. Waiting for more chapters.” There is only one chapter up so far, but I can already tell you this. We’ve featured to many stories with this exact plot.

Sample:

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4223: Elaine Chapel, A Safe Place to Run, Ch 1
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Title: Elaine Chapel, A Safe Place to Run, Ch 1
Perpetrator:
xTragicTheGreatx
Sue-O-Meter: toxic
Cover/Banner Art: None
Summary:"Elaine Chapel, a muggle-born witch from America is running from her past. After the hurt and pain and confusion of a series of events, she had decided to use magic again and seeks refuge at Hogwarts as the new DADA teacher."
Full Name: Elaine Chapel
Species: American Sue
Hair: “thick velvety black hair”
Eyes: grey
Markings: pale skin
Possessions: I’m not pleased with her quarters. “It was lovely. There were two arm chairs, a chase lounge, and a love seat all matching and in a deep red wine color. A large fireplace was already going, warming the stone walls pleasantly. There was a bookshelf where a few chosen tomes had already been placed by whoever had decorated it. She investigated each room, pleased to see her own bathroom and showers, a small kitchenette, and finally the bedroom. She pulled her miniscule trunks out of her pocket, whispering the charm to return then to their previous size after setting them aside on the floor.
Connection to Canon:
Origin: She’s from America and running from her past, yet it doesn’t really go into any detail beyond making her out into a social recluse who looks at the world in an entirely pessimistic manner. Specifically, she’s from Southern California. She pretty much whines about the tantrums of magical children blowing it out of proportion, acts like Ilvermorny isn’t amazing like Hogwarts, but also whines about not having used magic in forever. (How did she become a teacher?) She succeeds in arriving late. Personality wise, Snape thankfully finds her annoyingly bubbly and fake and turns down her offer for helping with his potions class because she is good at potions. (Offering to help another teacher with their class is an ass move.) She then bursts into tears because Snape doesn’t want to give her the time of day after escorting her to her quarters. The second chapter involves her waking up from a nightmare. She then whines again. “She wished she could just disappear, but she wasn’t a coward. Running like this was her only option. How could she live with constant reminders? Back in California she couldn’t sleep, couldn’t eat. Couldn’t teacher her young students. She had dropped about fifteen pounds too many for her slight frame. Her ribs were so prominent and her hip and collar bones were sharp from hunger.” She’s still not coping, as she’s throwing up into the toilet after breakfast, but she blurts out that she has anxiety issues to Snape way to easily.
Special Abilities: The genre is Romance and Hurt/Comfort, but the character are Minerva, Flitwick, Severus and an OC. As such I am guessing the writer is pairing her character up with Snape, but completely forgetting the fact Snape is infatuated with Lily. The Sue expects special treatment despite being unprofessional. She has PTSD issues, but we’re also supposed to believe she’s dealing with her PTSD issue in a healthy manner when she is not.

Notes: I’m left wondering if the writer actually did any research into what they’re writing about. The character claims she isn’t a coward, but what do you call a person struggling to seek medical help when they needed it, but instead decided taking a job half-way around the world was the sound solution? Said character also has an eating disorder which is not being treated. If the writer did their research, it might make an interesting story, but the PTSD and eating disorder feel tacked on.

Sample:

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4222: Finding Home - Harry and Alex Potter
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Title: Finding Home
Perpetrator:
Ricochet Phoenix
Sue-O-Meter: Awful (though it could have gotten a worse rating had the story gotten past the first four chapters)
Cover/Banner Art: The cover is the Hogwarts crest.
Summary:Alex Potter is announced the boy who lived, while Harry is tossed to the shadows. Soon being left to his Aunt and Uncle, he is tossed into a world where the rules of magic was spun differently, and is on the brink of war. WBWL
Full Name: Harry and Alex Potter
Species: He’s the boy-who-lived-but-isn’t-known-as-the-boy-who-lived and he’s the not-the-boy-who-lived-but-is-identified-as-such.
Hair: “Alex had brown hair similar to his brothers but tinged a fiery red like Lily.”
Eyes: Harry’s twin brother has hazel eyes.”
Markings: Nothing specific.
Possessions: Nothing specific.
Connection to Canon: Sirius and Remus find Harry in the attic, but we’re supposed to believe Harry is “tossed to the shadows” simply because the writer says so. Alex is off being friends with Ron and Neville because he’s just that special, yet his twin isn’t special to him at all. They are playing tag where Alex proceeds to tell his twin touching the hair doesn’t count, and then when Harry tries tagging him again Alex accuses Harry of pushing him. That’s how Harry gets shipped off to his aunt and uncle. The threat is enough to send him into the 07-Ghost world. He ends up raised with the main character of the other fandom, yet gets upset because an adult who doesn’t know his name calls him child. Why? “Dumbledore called him child before. Never by his real name. He felt belittled because of that.” (Stop, please stop.) Back in the other world, Alex wakes up. “He couldn’t say that he hated his brother, but maybe a mild dislike. His brother was weird to him. Foreign. Despite the two being twins he could barely feel any sort of bond between the them.” He’s completely fine when his mother tells him they sent Harry away because his twin brother was jealous of how famous he was, but now he’s thinking Harry is a bad person. The main character of the other series, Teito, has nightmares Harry helps him through. Alex is wondering where his twin was, but there’s a line about how “they were training him to fight He Who Shall Not Be Named, it was his birthright, a blessing from a prophecy” He thinks Harry’s having a better time. Nobody notices Harry is gone for an entire month. Now Harry was sent away because it was the way to keep both twins safe. He is not with his aunt and uncle like Dumbledore planned.
Origin: We have another story where Harry’s twin is mistaken for the child who survived, but because of this Lily and James spoil his brother.
Special Abilities: With this story we always have the problem of Lily and James surviving to spoil Harry’s twin. We also have Harry suddenly become inclined towards books, which he was not before. We’re also supposed to believe parents act in the manner they do in the story. No, scratch that. Nobody acts like they should in this fic. Instead, they act the way the writer wants.

Notes: I don’t get the point of these stories where Harry’s brother is the boy-who-lived. They always forget some major points, such as the fact Lily and James should be dead, but the characters don’t act in a reasonable fashion.

Sample:

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4221: Morgana's Children - Draco Malfoy, Morganna/Morgan Le Fay
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Title: Morgana's Children
Perpetrator:
Twin Kats
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: Their avatar is likely from a came. The character has red skin and elf like ears, plus white hair.
Summary:In the year 2010 several odd things began happening. Children began to fall into coma's, the most prominent victims being players of 'The World'. What none knew was that this was only the beginning of a thousand year old prophecy/HPHACK crossover/AU/”
Full Name: Draco Malfoy/Macha, Morganna/Morgan Le Fay
Species: He’s supposed to be a canon character. She is supposed to be a computer program merged with
Hair: Nothing specific.
Eyes:  Draco’s eyes turn lavender a lot.
Markings: Nothing specific.
Possessions: Nothing specific.
Connection to Canon: Draco keeps fainting. The other stuff is pretty much a rehash of the .Hack material involving Tsukasa, so you get thinks like Morganna talking to Macha the cat about protecting Tsukasa. The connection between the two beyond the fact Draco is acting strangely talking about protecting Tsukasa is confusing, but I’m guessing Macha and Draco are supposed to be the same person.
Origin: The writer decided Morganna and Morgan Le Fay would be the same person yet doesn’t bother explaining how everything fits together. As the writer explains the phenomenon, “Still this muggle man, Harald Hoerwick she believed he was  called, did not know what he stumbled upon when he met her and her abode, so it was no wonder that he would be the catalyst for the start of one of the three foretelling’s her Prophet had given. […] After all, what idiot would mix the magical consciousness of the most powerful, and ancient, witch known as Morgan Le Fay with that of a computer program meant to be the building grounds of a massive online multiplayer game.
Special Abilities: Draco’s able to connect with this computer world because of it’s connection with Morgan Le Fay.

Notes: When the blending of two fandoms involves a canon character from one fandom sort of sleepwalking as another character of a second fandom through the exact same plot of the second fandom, I don’t think you have an actual crossover.

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