Potter Sue of the Day ([info]pottersues) wrote,
@ 2009-05-28 18:06:00
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Entry tags:awful, immortal, white spirit

TITLE: The Rare One
PERPETRATOR: DakotaCullen
SUE-O-METER: (awful)

FULL NAME: Dakota Shane
SPECIES: White Spirit
HAIR: dark
EYES: golden?
MARKINGS: scars on her neck
POSSESSIONS: a " thick Maine accent", "a white spaghettie-strap tank top and black carpis", "bright blue bra", "A robe with dragon scales layering on the arms, shoulders, and back; a black, fire proof tee shirt; black, dragon scaled jeans; and black hikers"

ORIGIN: Normally I don't post the summary, but really, "A chemical reaction with a vampire and magic makes one seventeen year old girl into an immortal, rare species called the “White Spirit”. The accident happened 6,282 years ago and she returns to Hogwarts with a destiny for a boy. What happens when the two meet? Can she save him from death? Can she keep her secret from others? Cedric Diggory is alive in this." I don't have
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: Is a new "student/professor" at Hogwarts. Has to protect her soul mate, Cedric. This includes watching him sleep. Protects him during the Tri-Wizard Tournament.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Can read minds. Is a "animegas": a wolf with golden eyes and bangs.

NOTES: Who doesn't love a good dose of Cedward?


SAMPLE:

I couldn’t believe the rage that was still left in me, for I had come back and skipped all my classes to sulk in the corner of the common room.

Me being me, I stayed out of temptation’s way, even though Cedric was shooting apologetic glances at me.

So, being bored, I read a book. I read a book about how to avoid my species. It was extremely painful, so I ended up throwing the book into a different corner of the room.

Then the horror I thought wouldn’t happen…suddenly came.

Ah shit.. Were my sudden thoughts when Cedric and Edwin bursted through the door like it was a huge surprise party going on later and they’re setting things up…

Dakota, get your ass out of that corner and stop being emo and come and say hello to your brother, Edwin’s thoughts directed to me as he changed into normal clothes from his robes.

“Doubt it,” I muttered. Glaring at Edwin, I watched him trip half way down the stairs and stumble into a chair.

“Well, if you doubt it, then keep on mopin…” Because you know what will happen. My brother didn’t dare finish his sentence because his eyes made mine travel to Cedric who was finishing pulling a tee shirt on. I got a glimpse of the abs and suddenly bit my lip.

I whimpered loudly as my sharp teeth involuntarily came into fangs and pierced my skin a bit. A blush creeped up my face before I could pale out again.

Mustering up the best I could, I stood up, making my way into the girls’ dormitory and changed into a white spaghettie-strap tank top and black carpis. I slipped my shoes off and came back down barefoot.

A few more people had come in, and were distracted by my apparrell. A sixth year let out a low wolf whistle, while his eyes lingered on my so-easy-to-see bright blue bra. Whoops. Oh well, it was going to be hot this weekend and everyone would wear what I was wearing…maybe something similar.

I heard the smallest of growls come from someone behind me. I smirked inwardly, but frowned as I turned around.

“What do you want?” I grumbled, crossing my arms.

“I want to apologize for making you angry earlier…” Cedric bit his lip and kept his grey eyes down.

“Eh heh. Sure. Riiiight.” I shook my head and sat down on the floor in front of the fire.

“No really. I mean it.” He pushed along the many people now, taking a seat next to me on the floor.

I looked at my hands, watching them glow in the warm light of the fire. Cedric grabbed my chin and locked my jaw, even though I could easily break the grasp when I wanted to. Looking me dead straight in the eye, I swear he was telling me that he loved me, but that wasn’t the case.

“I know I angered you, I feel so guilty of doing that. I know you’re probably upset with seeing Cho and I together, but maybe..just maybe…I could be with you too. I feel the connection, Dak. I do.” He looked so sincere that I wanted to sit a wee bit closer but it wouldn’t happen.

“I won’t be here tomorrow.” I said, touching the riveting scars on my neck. I had to go settle the dragons, maybe ending up with minor burns, for the first challenge.

“Oh, well, uhm, be safe where ever you go.” Cedric looked down again and released my jaw, I flexed the muscles before watching him shuffle to bed with everyone else.

-

Checking both ways, I snuck into the boys’ dormitory and ever so silently, stepped over to where Cedric layed, sleeping like a rock, unaware of my feared prescence.

He was sleeping on the top bunk, so I had to climb all the way up the bed post to sit on the edge of the bed. And I swore to God that he knew I was there because Cedric rolled onto his back, sat up, and looked me dead straight in the face.

….Ho….ly….shit.

I blinked and cocked my head like a dog.

“What’re doing!?!” He whisper yelled.

“Being what I’m meant to be.” I whispered back.

He stared blankly at me, obviously clueless.

“I have a…destiny and prophecy…to you. I have to protect you from no matter what, and I’m also destined to you. But I can’t tell much other than that, and also, I can’t tell you what I am, otherwise my cover’s blown.” I explained to le-clueless Cedric. He nodded, finally able to lay back down and let his head drop to the side.

“S’pose you’re also meant to watch me sleep?” He asked sarcasticly.

“Sorry.”

Cedric groaned and flopped onto one side before falling alseep again.

I muttered a WHOO and made my move.

Moving as stealthily as possible on a bed, I managed my way up next to Cedric, letting his arms close around me instinctively in his sleep. It felt right at that moment. His lips were lightly brushing my neck and his body lined up with my curves. I, of course, was out like a light.




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[info]dude_youfugly
2009-05-31 11:06 pm UTC (link)
A wolf with BANGS? Lovely! And I completely appreciate the misspelling of animagus. <_< Wait did she name the sue after HERSELF? Or does she just like the name Dakota?

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[info]dude_youfugly
2009-05-31 11:06 pm UTC (link)
Omg first comment :D

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(no subject) - [info]fl_brightside, 2009-05-31 11:07 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]dude_youfugly, 2009-05-31 11:08 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]ladysugarquill, 2009-06-01 12:06 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]starlight976, 2009-06-01 03:53 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]dude_youfugly, 2009-06-01 08:49 pm UTC
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(no subject) - [info]dude_youfugly, 2009-06-01 08:50 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]jzygail, 2009-06-02 10:23 am UTC

[info]zhangsizheng
2009-05-31 11:06 pm UTC (link)
...oh, wow. Ow. Ow.

Is an "animegas" a type of wind/fartbag that expells absurd amounts of animated Japanese air? The form it takes certainly implies...

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[info]rizny
2009-06-01 12:56 am UTC (link)
I LOL'd! XD

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[info]fl_brightside
2009-05-31 11:16 pm UTC (link)
No offense to Cedric-fans but seriously, what is everyone's obsession with saving him. It's not like JK killed him just to piss people off. Why doesn't anyone ever try and save Harry or prevent him from getting into the Goblet? You know, the kid who's blood Voldemort needed to come fully back to life in the first place?

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[info]ladyofwisdom
2009-05-31 11:21 pm UTC (link)
Ugh. I liked Cedric but I have to agree whole-heartedly. He was killed off for a reason.

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(no subject) - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-06-01 12:17 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]hildabeast, 2009-06-01 12:33 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]twilightiscrap, 2009-06-01 04:04 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]maximuski, 2009-06-02 03:02 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-06-02 02:45 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]maximuski, 2009-06-02 03:00 am UTC

[info]ladyofwisdom
2009-05-31 11:20 pm UTC (link)
"A chemical reaction with a vampire and magic makes one seventeen year old girl into an immortal, rare species called the “White Spirit”. The accident happened 6,282 years ago and she returns to Hogwarts with a destiny for a boy. What happens when the two meet? Can she save him from death? Can she keep her secret from others? Cedric Diggory is alive in this."

There are no words...

Also, NOTE TO SUETHORS:
WE DO NOT CARE WHAT YOUR SUE IS WEARING IN TERMS OF UNDERGARTMENTS. THANK YOU. GOOD NIGHT.

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[info]alteration_duck
2009-05-31 11:27 pm UTC (link)
"...soul mate, Cedric. This includes watching him sleep."
I think these words are related but I just can't figure out how. :-P

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[info]ladyofwisdom
2009-05-31 11:32 pm UTC (link)
Oh god. Reverse Edwarding. I need a facepalm icon.

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(no subject) - [info]alteration_duck, 2009-05-31 11:46 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]cosmosmariner, 2009-06-01 02:58 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-06-01 12:18 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]wolkenser, 2009-06-01 12:47 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]wolkenser, 2009-06-01 12:49 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-06-01 11:39 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]morde, 2009-06-01 03:49 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-06-01 11:40 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]adeluxe, 2009-06-01 03:28 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-06-02 01:35 am UTC

[info]grandanois
2009-05-31 11:29 pm UTC (link)
Roflrofl, that "stop being so emo" remark just kills me. XDDD

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[info]__fantine
2009-05-31 11:29 pm UTC (link)
Maybe I'm just horrifically ignorant of the East Coast, but all of the people from Maine I've met have been suspiciously accent-less. Any locals want to broaden my knowledge of Maine accents?

You know, if these girls want to write Twilight fanfiction, they should write Twilight fanfiction. I know "Cedric" is a sexier name than "Edward" (seriously, Edward is a family name. One of my uncles or cousins something-removed is Edward Lastname X and he insists everyone call him Edward the Fifth. Not Ed, not Edward, Edward the Fifth. Even his wife and mother and everyone) but what's dead is dead. Go fap to your sparkly vampires some more and stay out of HP fandom.

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[info]im_weird_people
2009-06-01 12:17 am UTC (link)
there is a Maine accent... it's kind of similar to a Boston accent, that being the best description I can think of for it. It's really not that attractive at all, so why someone would give their character a "thick" Maine accent is beyond me.

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(no subject) - [info]__fantine, 2009-06-01 12:25 am UTC
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[info]rizny
2009-05-31 11:48 pm UTC (link)
I read a book about how to avoid my species. It was extremely painful, so I ended up throwing the book into a different corner of the room.

This is a totally accurate description of how I feel reading these Sues, and it definitely needs to be on an icon. it's amazing how quotable and hilarious these things are.

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[info]razzledazzle4
2009-06-01 12:02 am UTC (link)
LOL!!

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(no subject) - [info]rizny, 2009-06-01 01:11 am UTC
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[info]midoriri
2009-06-01 12:05 am UTC (link)
Am I the only one thinking that white top + bright blue bra = Bad Idea?

“S’pose you’re also meant to watch me sleep?” He asked sarcasticly.
“Sorry.”
Cedric groaned and flopped onto one side before falling alseep again.
"Get out of my bed!" Cedric snapped, pushing me to the floor. Someone else woke up, noticed me there, and called a teacher.

Fixed.

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[info]ladysugarquill
2009-06-01 12:10 am UTC (link)
Am I the only one thinking that white top + bright blue bra = Bad Idea?

No, you're not *weeps for this sue's dead fashion sense*

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(no subject) - [info]twilightiscrap, 2009-06-01 04:06 am UTC
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[info]undying_rose17
2009-06-01 12:08 am UTC (link)
I have to say, though, it's refreshing to see the stalker tables turned on our beloved Ceddy Bear for once.

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[info]bookgrrrl2006
2009-06-01 12:20 am UTC (link)
"animegas" = a Japanese-style animated wolf with golden eyes, bangs, and, apparently, digestive issues.

Also, are vampires and magic precisely chemical?

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[info]miss_mercurial
2009-06-01 03:27 am UTC (link)
"animegas" = a Japanese-style animated wolf with golden eyes, bangs, and, apparently, digestive issues.

THIS. *hands you cookies for your awesomeness*

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[info]darth_gojira
2009-06-01 12:21 am UTC (link)
Okay, named Dakota, associated with Wolves, "White Spirit"...and she's from Maine. She can't even get her STEREOTYPES right!

And how can she be a student AND a professor? I can't help but Snape having a lot of fun with that. "I can give you as many detentions as I want, miss Shane. You're a student, too" "But I have class...with myself...."

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[info]rowenaraven13
2009-06-01 01:10 am UTC (link)
How can she be a student AND a professor?

I think it's the newest version of being in all the Houses. She's that speshul.

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OT, But I Have a Question - (Anonymous), 2009-06-01 05:29 pm UTC
Re: OT, But I Have a Question - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-06-02 01:37 am UTC
Re: OT, But I Have a Question - (Anonymous), 2009-06-02 02:48 am UTC

[info]rowenaraven13
2009-06-01 12:47 am UTC (link)
Yes, this is just the Sue I need before I leave Maine for good tomorrow.

It's not Bar Harbor, it's Bah Haabaah. Forget the R. It does not exist. Well, until you re-insert it where it doesn't belong, like "Arguster" and "Arcadier".

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[info]theorclair
2009-06-01 07:41 pm UTC (link)
And "idear."

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[info]piss_in_a_cup
2009-06-01 12:58 am UTC (link)
"a wolf with golden eyes and bangs"

I misread that as "a wolf with green eyes and mange", which would be sad yet hilarious.

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[info]wolkenser
2009-06-01 01:18 am UTC (link)
Well this is interesting. According to the character and author's history, this story should be taking place in the 1800s or the early 1900s at the latest.

The history according to the author- "Life was hard 6,282 years ago. The accident between a seventeen year old witch and a vampire was the news for two weeks among the wizarding world. The girl went missing, having seen blood-covered footsteps leading to the forest before disappearing.

When this girl disappeared, her life changed and time went in the blink of an eye. She was transformed into the most rarest species, and the last, the White Spirit. Before this, her life was lonely, a mist surrounding her. Now, she has a true destiny, a destiny to save people, a destiny as the vampiric creature. To keep her species up, she stayed in hiding for all those years.

One day, she found a prophecy from a seer in the late nineteenth century. She had said that the girl had a a future entwined with a boy destined to death from Lord Voldemort. How will this creature deal with it? Will she simply just let it fly, or will her love for the boy take over her other reasons of existence and will she protect him?"

The history according to the character-"My history goes back 6,282 years ago, when the accident happened. I was a young witch, starting an experiment with a vampire. I wanted to see how the vampire reacted to salt water when it's shoved down his throat. Apparently, I was completely wrong with my hypothesis. The vampire spat venom out, and the venom absorbed into my skin. My veins changed color while my arteries faded. My veins were sea blue, and my heart had stopped pumping. I passed out on the floor of my cave, breathing ever so slightly. When I awoke, four people were surrounding me. All of them were in this hyena-like form, and they wore a shocked and fearful expression. I looked down at my hands, they were a shimmering white light that lit up the cave.

I, nowadays, walk along as the White Spirit. I keep away the demons half the time because we're mortal enemies. But, no longer than a decade ago, I learned that I had a prophecy destined to a boy. What kept me to the British school of Wizardy and Witchcraft was that single prophecy, and my destiny."


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(Anonymous)
2009-06-01 02:26 am UTC (link)
What the fuck kind of experiment invloves pouring salt water down a vampire's throat? What could that prove? She says that her hypothesis was wrong and the vampire attacked her.No shit? If you force salt water down almost anything's throat it will most likely react by attacking you. This whole "life was hard 6,282 years ago" really pssed me off. I focused my undergrad studies on ancient cultures During the 4th millennium BCE Egypt and Mesopotamia were just inventing writing and basic science and math. Human civilization as we know it was in its infancy. Humanity was still perfecting agriculture and all early scientifc discovers delt with how to make various aspects of farmimng more productive. Now because I am a huge nerd when I am board I like to think up ideas about wizarding history. IIRC from the last book JRK says that you can't use magic to conjure up food so that means ancient wizards would have lead lives similar to muggles at the time, and experimrntal magic probally all delt with ways to making farming and raiseing livestock more productive. Ancient wizards would not have wasted their time pouring salt warter down vampire's throats BECAUSE THEY HAD NOTHING TO GAIN BY IT. I don't even see why a modern wizard would do it. Also 6,000 years ago there was no secret wizarding world.Wizards and witches lived out in the open as village shamans or other types of relgious figures. During that time magic was accepted by everyone as a part of life and I beleive that JKR said the split occured much later. I doubt the stupid teenager who likes to shove things down dangerous monster's throats dissapperance would have really been a surprise to anybody. Sorry for the wall of text, are there any other history buffs out there who share my pain?

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(no subject) - [info]calliope427, 2009-06-01 12:55 pm UTC
(no subject) - (Anonymous), 2009-06-01 05:36 pm UTC
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(no subject) - [info]miss_mercurial, 2009-06-01 03:36 am UTC
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[info]leikomgwtfbbq
2009-06-01 01:37 am UTC (link)
On seeing "she has a Maine accent," I immediately thought of Stephen King, and that led me to thinking that The Dark Tower and Harry Potter would be a pretty cool crossover.

Also that Randall Flagg should show up and totally own this Sue.

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[info]miss_mercurial
2009-06-01 03:33 am UTC (link)
Wow. Just when I thought the Sue-species couldn't get any stupider...
And also... I can see the "science of magic" being cool. I've even played with it myself a little bit. But with no explanation and the piss-poor excuse for a creation story (Vampire venom? Salt water? ORLY?), the "chemical reaction" here is nothing but FAIL.

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[info]fer_de_lance
2009-06-01 04:50 am UTC (link)
Yeah. I read that summary sentence and kept trying to figure out how you fit a vampire into an Erlenmeyer flask, not to mention how you kept it from immediately leaping out again and ripping your throat out before you added magic, however that's done (powdered wand shavings? Because if you just stuck the wand in, wouldn't that be like staking, and you'd just end up with dead vampire?)

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Rather off-topic, but... - (Anonymous), 2009-06-01 05:40 pm UTC

[info]cosmosmariner
2009-06-01 03:37 am UTC (link)
First of all, if your name is Dakota, why is your nickname "Dak"? I mean, like "Dack"? Why not "Kota"? Why do you need a nickname at all?

And what's a le-clueless Cedric? An extra-dumb French Diggory?

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[info]alteration_duck
2009-06-01 06:30 pm UTC (link)
Or how about "Cody?" I know two people, one male and one femaile, who's name is Dakota and they go by "Cody."

Oh, and your icon makes me happy.

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(no subject) - [info]paukenwirbel13, 2009-06-01 07:21 pm UTC

[info]twilightiscrap
2009-06-01 04:16 am UTC (link)
STALKER! STALKER! STALKER!

Go back to jail where you belong with Edward Cullen, you freaky destiny!stalker.

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[info]fer_de_lance
2009-06-01 04:48 am UTC (link)
Can she keep her secret from others? Cedric Diggory is alive in this." I don't have CONNECTIONS TO CANON

I read this all together, as above, and thought, "hey, finally, a Suethor who's at least honest!" I take it that the summary is cut off, or something?

a wolf with [...] </i>bangs</i>

I, uh, good grief. I don't even have words. Except "furry fandom is that way ---->, get out of my HP."

"a white spaghettie-strap tank top
"bright blue bra"


Does this sound like: 1. a bad idea, 2. an extremely unprofessional outfit, to anyone else here? I'm pretty sure none of my teachers ever wore something like that to teach in (maybe the Sue doesn't either; I didn't get that far; but WHAT is the Sue fascination with wearing bras that show through one's shirt? This is like the third or more-th time we've seen this!)

"A robe with dragon scales layering on the arms, shoulders, and back; a black, fire proof tee shirt;</i>

Wait, the robe is covered in dragon scales, but the TEE SHIRT is fireproof?!

black, dragon scaled jeans

That? That is going to give new meaning to the word 'chafe'. Enjoy those long, stairway-riddled Hogwarts hallways, Sue!

Has to protect her soul mate, Cedric. This includes watching him sleep.

...The next time someone tries to tell me that "Twilight" is just harmless fun, I'm going to send them here. Girls get their ideas of appropriate behaviour from somewhere, and it's pretty obvious what this one's operating on. *shudders*

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(Anonymous)
2009-06-01 05:43 pm UTC (link)
If those are genuine dragon scales, Hagrid's going to call the Department for the Regulation and Control of Magical Creatures on her Sue-ass. I'm pretty sure they don't like dragon hunting...and not just because the hunters would have the lower survival rate.

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[info]azuresky001
2009-06-01 09:33 am UTC (link)
I think she should have named her character Dakota ShaMe. It would fit her character much more, don't you think?

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[info]grandanois
2009-06-01 10:08 am UTC (link)
I fart and snore in my sleep, I wouldn't want someone to watch me. XD

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(Anonymous)
2009-06-01 10:15 am UTC (link)
Wow, I didn't known Maine was around 6,282 years ago!

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[info]cyniconvention
2009-06-01 12:09 pm UTC (link)
Nor did I!

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[info]paukenwirbel13
2009-06-01 11:11 am UTC (link)
If you go on the Suethor's profile page, you'll notice she has FOUR stories with a character called Dakota. One of whom hooks up with Edward.

I used to like that name!

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[info]cyniconvention
2009-06-01 12:40 pm UTC (link)
Moving as stealthily as possible on a bed, I managed my way up next to Cedric, letting his arms close around me instinctively in his sleep. It felt right at that moment. His lips were lightly brushing my neck and his body lined up with my curves. I, of course, was out like a light.


You're supposed to watch him sleep, not let him subconsciously feel you up.

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