Potter Sue of the Day ([info]pottersues) wrote,
@ 2009-02-17 10:38:00
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Current mood: busy
Current music:Shut Up - Simple Plan
Entry tags:awful, related to harry, speshul eyes

TITLE: Forbidden Love
PERPETRATOR: DarkElvishAngel
SUE-O-METER: (awful)

FULL NAME: Rain Star Twilight aka Rain Star Potter
SPECIES: Witch
HAIR: "midnight raven with silver highlights"
EYES: "stunning-silver eyes" with a bit of black. After the big reveal of her true parentage they turn a green slightly darker than Harry's.
MARKINGS: tanned, "not thin but I’m not heavy, I’m just perfect for a girl who plays quidditch". She's 5'8"
POSSESSIONS: a BFF named Sarah Rosewood, a Disturbed CD, the Two Towers, New Found Glory pjs.

ORIGIN: America. They attended Salem Witches Institute for six years and are now going to Hogwarts.
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: Runs into Draco in the Leaky Cauldron. She acts hostile to him and he calls her beautiful. A match made in heaven everyone! She meets up with Draco later, and Lucius freaks otu and hits Draco and Rain. Then Draco challenges his father. We learn that she is Harry's cousin, as her mother is James' sister. In actual fact she is Harry's sister, not cousin.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Plays Quidditch and is in a band, Dark Phoenix. She writes the song and music for the band. Is a "punk" and "has an attitude problem".

NOTES: Maybe it's a troll, maybe it's not. I'm on the fence with this one, so I'm just leaving it as "non-troll".


SAMPLE:

“I hope my muse did not leave me,” they looked confused, “I write songs. Sarah and I are in a band.” Their mouths formed “O”s.

“So what do you play?” Ron asked looking at the picture again.

“What do you mean play?” Sarah asked.

“What type of music do you play?”

“Punk, modern rock, whatever she writes.” She pointed to me.

“Cool!” said a red head that was next to Hermione.

“Ginny?!” Ron warned.

“Who is she?” Sarah asked after the girl left.

“Ginny, my youngest and only sister.” Ron said putting more peas on his plate. He ate just like

River at Thanksgiving Dinner. By the end of dinner I think Ron was going to blow.

“I don’t see how one guy can eat so much yet stay thin,” I looked around to see if I was heading the right way, “I miss the professors at Salem.”

“Salem?” three voices asked. I swear those three didn’t get things, it was going to be fun with them around. I could tell already that we were going to be friends.

“Yes, Salem Witches Institute. We went there.” Sarah said sadly.

“What people will do to get out of school?” drawled a voice behind us. Ron’s face went just as red as his hair. We turned to see a grease ball with legs, which we have to call a professor.

“Hello, professor Snape.” Hermione said looking at the picture of my mom and her brother.

“As the headmaster said, let’s not be missing any part of my room.” His voice matched Mr. Malfoy’s.

“Yes, sir.” Sarah and I chimed together. After that he just walked off with his robes flailing on the wind.

“Who was that?” I asked taking back my picture.

“Professor Snape, the potions master here.” Harry answered after a short period of time with no one talking. We walked up to the common room. I sat in the corner working on some songs and the music to go with them.

“Rain, come over here?” Harry called out. I shook my head no, so he walked over to me.

“A, B, B, C, A, D” I mumbled to myself.

“What are you doing?”

“Writing some songs.” I looked up to see the boy- who- lived sitting next to me.

“My dad had a sister named Elizabeth Sarah Potter. What is your mum’s name? Here is the only picture of them, I think.”

“Elizabeth Sarah Twilight, but before she married her name was Potter. It is them let alone my godfather.” I kept writing the song.

“Your god father?” he looked at me like I was crazy, I rolled my eyes.

“Yes, he is my godfather, so do you have something to say?”

“How can he be your godfather when he is mine?”

“I don’t know, he just is. He was at my house the week before Sarah and I came to London and here.”

“I saw him die.”

“Black die? No!” now I’m thinking that he is crazy.

“Harry, Rain! Come join the party.” Sarah yelled over the music playing. Harry was about to leave but waited for me.

“Go on, I’m not up to party right now.” I said just finishing ‘Bleed Like Me’ and was close to finishing the music for it.

“Rain, what is wrong? You’re never like this,” Sarah sat down next to me and looked at the song,

“Can you tell that I pick my poison well? That I have no more to sell to you. This really is not like you.” I didn’t need her thinking that I was going to go back to my old ways, I wouldn’t go back to that path, I couldn’t do that to my family or friends.

“I know, there is a pain inside that won’t go away, and every time it does it just comes back stronger.”

“When did this start? Before or after Draco.” her eyes showed the worry that her face did not.

“After him, I don’t know why I am having this feeling.”

“You’re in love. That is the only thing I can tell you about them.” with that she walked off. ‘Love!?!? Me in love! She has lost her mind, just like her hoodie says.’ I thought walking over to the party to show them how it is really done.

“I’m not in love, Sarah.” I whispered in her ear, she looked at me, with a look that says ‘Right! I’m the Queen of England.’ I bowed to her. I smirked; I was going to play a little game, that’s what she gets for telling me that I’m in love.

“What are you doing?” Ron asked. I quickly looked but then looked right back down.

“Bowing to the Queen of England,” I replied, I could see Hermione shake her head from the corner, “and I would do the same. She may have you beheaded.” I made my voice slightly higher then what it would be, Harry, Ron and Hermione bowed to her too.

“Not funny, guys get up.”

“But, milady, we do not want to get beheaded!” Harry cried. She grabbed his robes and pulled him up. We stood up because she would have done the same thing to us.

“Guys, I’m going to bed.” I yawned. I walked up to the girl’s dorm, slipped into my black New Found Glory pjs and drifted off into a dreamless sleep.




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(Anonymous)
2009-02-17 04:42 pm UTC (link)
it certainly LOOKS like english, and yet...i have no comprehension of what just happened.

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(Anonymous)
2009-02-19 02:27 pm UTC (link)
it certainly LOOKS like english

I dispute that.

- Dan Hemmens

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(Anonymous)
2009-02-17 04:42 pm UTC (link)
(dance)

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[info]lostmustard
2009-02-17 04:51 pm UTC (link)
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RAAAAIIIN!

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[info]hsvh
2009-02-17 06:52 pm UTC (link)
YES.

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(no subject) - [info]liketwilight_xo, 2009-02-18 02:25 am UTC

[info]lostmustard
2009-02-17 04:52 pm UTC (link)
Also,

After that he just walked off with his robes flailing on the wind.

Oh, honey, they're not flailing. They're trying to escape the story.

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[info]ennta
2009-02-17 05:40 pm UTC (link)
I am so confused right now. What just happened?

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[info]darth_gojira
2009-02-17 06:49 pm UTC (link)
Generic awfulness, I believe

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[info]catsrae
2009-02-17 05:57 pm UTC (link)
Wait, if she's James Potter's sister's daughter AND Harry's sister, does that make Lily James' sister?

Because aside from being incest, that doesn't make sense. James is a pure-blood (Right?), and Lily's muggle-born. Now, I'm not an expert, but I'm pretty sure you can't be a pure-blood wizard with a muggle-born sister. That makes absolutely no sense.

...Oh, yeah, sorry. Using logic again. Gotta stop that...

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[info]celestineangel
2009-02-17 06:00 pm UTC (link)
I'm assuming the Suethor intended to suggest James actually did have siblings and was not an only child, throwing canon out the window.

I want to know how revelations affect eye color.

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(no subject) - [info]frankieb_sq87, 2009-02-17 10:43 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]littlecodfish, 2009-02-18 12:11 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]little_masaouki, 2009-02-24 01:09 am UTC

[info]celestineangel
2009-02-17 05:58 pm UTC (link)
...

.....

Whut?

There are so many logical problems with this to begin with, without counting the disastrous use of the English language.

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[info]schroduck
2009-02-17 06:32 pm UTC (link)
“A, B, B, C, A, D” I mumbled to myself.

“What are you doing?”

“Writing some songs.” I looked up to see the boy- who- lived sitting next to me.


This isn't Harry Potter. This is The Jackson Five working hard on their early drafts.

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[info]darth_gojira
2009-02-17 06:51 pm UTC (link)
This one manages to be unimaginative, completely insane, ludicrous, generic, confusing, obnoxious and incoherent at the same time. Impressive.

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[info]hsvh
2009-02-17 06:54 pm UTC (link)
Now, I'm not a musician, nor will I ever claim to be, but don't you usually use an instrument when writing music, instead of ranting off the notes?

Or is that just me?

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[info]littlecodfish
2009-02-17 09:01 pm UTC (link)
Unless she's been playing music for years or can play by ear, she could know the sound of the note by its name, so in her head she could put the notes together and they'd probably make sense. Of course, it would be easier to have the instrument handy to try it out.

But even then...:|

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(no subject) - [info]fer_de_lance, 2009-02-18 05:10 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]littlecodfish, 2009-02-18 05:28 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]missblackheart7, 2009-02-18 02:22 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]hakojo, 2009-02-17 09:03 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]feuillu, 2009-02-17 10:11 pm UTC
(no subject) - (Anonymous), 2009-02-19 02:03 pm UTC

[info]malinbe
2009-02-17 06:57 pm UTC (link)
I did not understand a thing about it. What? Cousin and sister? And doesn't this girl read the newspapers? I thought the Prophet featured Sirius' death all over it. And, wtf music? Does it have any reason to be there at all?

I... I am confused.

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[info]missblackheart7
2009-02-17 07:26 pm UTC (link)
I'm having a 'pain inside' my head ever since I read this. Does that mean I'm in love with Draco, too?

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[info]laciemn
2009-02-17 09:11 pm UTC (link)
Yes, we're on in love with Draco on the inside, and it causes us much pain...paaaain
*moans and cries*

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(no subject) - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-02-17 11:20 pm UTC

[info]clichealert
2009-02-17 08:27 pm UTC (link)
By the end of dinner I think Ron was going to blow.

When I first read this, my first thought was "Who?" something rather dirty. I am shameless.

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[info]star20breeze
2009-02-17 08:31 pm UTC (link)
Rain, rain
Go away
You're a Mary sue
so just stay away

And since when having a pain inside you mean that you're in love? Couldn't it just mean that she's sick? Oh, wait no, Mary sues don't get sick unless it's to provide angst. So next time I meet a guy and after, I feel in pain, that obviously means we are meant to be? I'll keep that in mind.

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[info]prolixe
2009-02-18 01:57 am UTC (link)
!!! your icon is the same design as my shirt from Delia's. 0_0

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(no subject) - [info]fer_de_lance, 2009-02-18 05:12 am UTC

[info]sinkinto_heart
2009-02-17 09:45 pm UTC (link)
Uh...what?

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[info]dali_doll
2009-02-17 10:35 pm UTC (link)
'She has lost her mind, just like her hoodie says.’

Could you imagine wearing a hoodie around Hogwarts?

The mind boggles.

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[info]darth_gojira
2009-02-17 11:20 pm UTC (link)
I'd like to see it just to see McGonagall go medieval on her.

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[info]maeve_79
2009-02-17 11:21 pm UTC (link)
I really don't understand how Quidditch makes you skinny/is exercise. Riding around on a broom = broom does the work.

I don't think if I rode around on a broom all day I would get skinny.

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[info]hsvh
2009-02-17 11:33 pm UTC (link)
Well, I suppose it has something to do with upper body strength. I have a brother who snowmobiles and dirtbikes, and he'd tell you that you need to be in shape for it.

He's not wrong, either ... my arms and abs KILLED me when I didn't heed his warnings last winter. =\

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(no subject) - [info]missblackheart7, 2009-02-18 02:26 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]clockworktoast, 2009-02-18 04:37 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]darth_gojira, 2009-02-19 11:34 pm UTC

(Anonymous)
2009-02-17 11:33 pm UTC (link)
"Rain Star Twilight". I'm not sure I want to read this one.

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[info]cyniconvention
2009-02-18 01:50 am UTC (link)
Ditto

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[info]eilinora
2009-02-18 02:37 am UTC (link)
( Does Hot Topic make band pjs? )



Well, they sell Edward Cullen body glitter. I think that's proof enough they carry anything imaginable to cater to adolescent gawth girls.

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[info]burninglikeice
2009-02-18 03:47 am UTC (link)
I was just going to ask that. I mean, the bands I like don't have PJs, I'm pretty sure.

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(no subject) - [info]underyou, 2009-02-18 05:31 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]ladysugarquill, 2009-02-21 05:19 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]curlychikk, 2009-02-22 05:31 pm UTC

[info]sandkitty
2009-02-18 06:59 am UTC (link)
“You’re in love. That is the only thing I can tell you about them.” with that she walked off. ‘Love!?!? Me in love! She has lost her mind, just like her hoodie says.’ I thought walking over to the party to show them how it is really done.

This is funny. Really funny.

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[info]heartstart
2009-02-18 10:15 am UTC (link)
“I don’t see how one guy can eat so much yet stay thin,” I looked around to see if I was heading the right way, “I miss the professors at Salem.”

I don't understand the connection between these two sentences.

Actually, I don't understand this story at all.

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[info]betwixtzelled
2009-02-18 11:14 pm UTC (link)
I was wondering that too but in the end I just decided that the author was drink when she/he wrote this.

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[info]betwixtzelled
2009-02-18 11:01 pm UTC (link)
I reread this three times and I still have no idea what happened. I'm still trying to get past that character's god awful name and generic personality.

If I was trapped in this story I would be writing songs like "Bleed Like me" too.

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[info]carolpent
2009-02-19 12:06 am UTC (link)
Bleed Like Me is an actual song, a really good one. I used to know all the lyrics. XD Pity to see it used here.

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(no subject) - [info]xvmorganalefayv, 2009-03-03 01:42 pm UTC

[info]anisetheghosted
2009-02-19 03:29 am UTC (link)
Wasn't "Dark Phoenix" the name Ben Stiller's character in Mystery Men tried to pass off as his own?

Okay, let's look at that again: Ben Stiller's character. Tried. To pass off. "Dark Phoenix" as his name. </i>Every part of that is fail.</i>

So making it your band name =/= good idea.

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[info]miss_mercurial
2009-02-19 05:49 am UTC (link)
Maybe they've just read too much X-men...Or is that only me?
*looks around*
Yep, I guess it's only me.
*goes to hide in the corner with the rest of the nerds*

This was probably the thought process:
"Omigod, so u kno whats like totally kewl? Darkness. And phoenixes are, like totally cool too, with rebirth and all that symbolic stuff. So we should name our band Dark Phoenix, and everybody will think we're hawt!"

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(no subject) - [info]burninglikeice, 2009-02-19 05:58 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]betwixtzelled, 2009-02-19 11:03 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]little_masaouki, 2009-02-24 01:16 am UTC

[info]catatonicjoy
2009-02-19 05:16 am UTC (link)
Awh mang, me a sparkly-poo over this crap anyday.

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[info]catatonicjoy
2009-02-19 05:17 am UTC (link)
Frick, I forgot 'give'.

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[info]miss_mercurial
2009-02-19 05:41 am UTC (link)
" By the end of dinner I think Ron was going to blow."
Not as much as your story does, sweetie.

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