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TITLE: Kuroi no Tenchi
PERPETRATOR: Meitsuki
SUE-O-METER: (toxic)

FULL NAME: Kuro Shihiro
SPECIES: Witch
HAIR: "long black hair so dark it looked like it had blue highlights"
EYES: "bright blue"
MARKINGS: "thin but as she walked you could see the muscles moving across her body". Gross.
POSSESSIONS: "black pants tucked into knee high black leather boots, a black, tight, sleeveless shirt that had the words Bad ass above a picture of a angle with black wings and fangs, over all this she wore a black leather trench coat"

ORIGIN: Japan, but she is originally from America. She has to "interfere" to help defeat Voldemort. She goes to Hogwarts posing as a sixteen-year-old
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: Draco assumes she is a "slut" at first. Everyone falls in love with her when they see her in the Great Hall. The Sorting Hat can not access all parts of her mind. She is sorted into Gryffindor and Slytherin because she wants to cause a stir. She gets to verbally spar with Malfoy, meets Blaise, Harry, Hermione and Ron. She explains the difference to Hermione between dark and evil. She gets to call Snape "Snape-sensei" and Dumbledore "Kocho". She is going to be paired with Draco.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: A special kind of wandless magic. Intense control over her mind. She can "sense" dark creatures. Amazing Potions skillz.

NOTES: Special-Sue is special.


SAMPLE:

"I would like to introduce to you all Kuro Shihiro." Professor McGonagall rushed up to Dumbledore and whispered something urgently into his ear.

"It seems Miss Shihiro cannot be found. But I have a feeling she will be here shortly." Just as the words left his mouth the doors to the great hall sprang open and a figure stood their silhouetted in moonlight. "Ah, hear she is now."

As the figure stepped in to the hall and began to make her way up to the head table gasps and murmurs began to be heard. The gasps were for one reason, and the talking was all along the same lines, ".... She’s beautiful...." “.... Gorgeous..." ".... Never seen anything that compares, well maybe a vela, but nothing else..."

Harry gasped when he saw her. 'She looks like an angel, a dark angel, but still an angel' and indeed she did, she had long black hair so dark it looked like it had blue highlights, bright blue eyes, she was 5' 7", she was thin but as she walked you could see the muscles moving across her body. She wore black pants tucked into knee high black leather boots, a black, tight, sleeveless shirt that had the words Bad ass above a picture of a angle with black wings and fangs, over all this she wore a black leather trench coat. She walked up to the head table with her hands stuck in the pockets of her coat and with a grace none had seen before.

'She's not gonna be a Hufflepuff, and maybe she won't be a Gryffindor. Maybe, hopefully, she'll be a Slytherin.' Thought Draco as he watched her walk up to the head table.

"Now that you have arrived it is time for you to be sorted” Dumbledore said. "Sit down on the stool and put the sorting hat on you head if you please."

She smiled slightly as she sat down on the stool, placing her left leg across her right and then placed the sorting hat on her head. 'This should be interesting' she thought. The whole hall was silenced in anticipation of which house she would be put in, each person wishing that it were his or her house.

'Strange’ said a voice in her head, 'there are parts of your brain I cannot get into.'

'For good reason'

'Care to tell me those reasons, and where and how you learned such control over your mind?'

'Lets just say there’s more to me than there seems and all will be revealed later.'

'Fine, fine, Now where should you go?'

'How bout we spice things up a bit?'

'Like how'

'How bout you put me in two houses?'

'I can't do that'

'Why not?'

'Because...Um...because...OK there isn't any reason I can't'

'Then do it. Put me in the two houses that will cause the most stir. How bout the two houses with the greatest rivalry.'

‘No I don’t think I should.’

‘Come on just do it.’

'Um.... Well...OK. Gryffindor and Slytherin it is'

"GRYFFINDOR..." claps and cheers stared at the Gryffindor table "and SLYTHERIN." The clapping and cheers abruptly stopped and it was complete silence in the great hall. Even the teachers were shocked.

‘Well I was half right’ thought Draco ‘she is in Gryffindor.’

Kuro took off the sorting hat, turned around to look at Dumbledore and said in a soft, but strong voice "told you I’d make a stir, kocho."

"Indeed you did, Kuro, indeed you did. Now how is this to work you can't sleep in both dorms and you can't sit at both tables either."

"I have already thought of a solution to that kocho. How about I have a tower to myself somewhere not only because I can't be in both dorms but also because I’m not used to sleeping and living in such a close proximity to others."

"That’s a good idea for where you are to sleep. Now do you have any ideas about how to sit at both tables?"

"Indeed I do” and with that said Kuro turned around and smirked at the students. "Hold on tight” She put her hands out, palm upwards, facing the tables. She began to lift her hands and as she did the four house tables rose off the ground. She moved her hands and arranged the tables so that the Slytherin and Gryffindor tables were in the center and the Ravenclaw and Hufflepuff tables were on the outside. She then lowered the tables back on the ground. The Slytherins and Gryffindors glared at each other from their tables.

Kuro chuckled 'kids are so funny now a days. Have to remember I’m supposed to be sixteen so I have to act like them. Damn.' Kuro then waved her had and a small section of table appeared between the Slytherin and Gryffindor tables at the opposite end of the hall from the head table. She waived her hand again and a black throne like chair appeared there. Kuro then turned to face Dumbledore.

"Is that acceptable kocho?"

"Yes it seems to work."

"As you can all see I don't use a wand,” said Kuro as she turned to face her classmates. "I hope that won't be a problem. Now I bet you all wish to eat after that long train ride so I will take my seat." With a final wave of her hand Kuro transported herself to her chair.




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[info]bellereve_
2009-02-12 04:24 am UTC (link)
She says her pen name means "black dog" in Japanese.

...I don't know very much Japanese, but I don't think it does.

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[info]corvae_regina
2009-02-12 04:40 am UTC (link)
You are right. If it was spelled mitsuki, then it could mean beautiful moon or 3 months/moons depending on the kanji. I looked up meitsuki in my electronic dictionary and I can't seem to find it...

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(no subject) - [info]r05km, 2009-02-19 12:04 am UTC
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OT but... - [info]ellietrix, 2009-02-12 06:29 pm UTC

[info]myhappyplace961
2009-02-12 04:36 am UTC (link)
Ooo. Special-sue who is desired by everybody, gets a tower to herself, can do special magic, and randomly addresses the whole school to explain her special magic. My favorite type! NOT.

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[info]little_masaouki
2009-02-12 10:02 am UTC (link)
so did they just happen to have a spare house tower available for just such an occasion?

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(no subject) - [info]linwenilid, 2009-02-12 03:04 pm UTC
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[info]meepalicious
2009-02-12 04:48 am UTC (link)
Dear Suethor: your Japanese fails.

As [info]bellereve_ and [info]corvae_regina pointed out, her username is, well, not what she says it is, as is her title. I think she means "Kuroi Tenshi," which would translate as "Black Angel." That "no" does not belong, at least as far as I know. (Some Japanese colors are considered nouns and need "no" to connect to the noun they modify. I'm 99.9% sure "kuroi" is not one of them.)

ETA: Uh, my ability to read also fails. That says "tenchi," not "tenshi." Whoops! No idea what "tenchi" is supposed to mean. D=

Edited at 2009-02-12 04:58 am UTC

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[info]little_masaouki
2009-02-12 09:25 am UTC (link)
Tenchi means Heaven (Ten) and Earth (Chi) with strong connotations of balance similar to yin-yang. Heaven represents the spirit and Earth represents the body. I'm guessing she did, in fact, mean to say Tenshi since she won't shut up about black angels.

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(no subject) - [info]kakeochi_umai, 2009-02-12 11:20 am UTC

[info]curlychikk
2009-02-12 04:53 am UTC (link)
WHY. WHY THE MANGLED JAPANESE.

CAN'T YOU BE SATISFIED WITH MAULING YOUR OWN GODDAMN LANGUAGE, SUETHORS? Leave other people's ALONE.

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[info]xdespondence
2009-02-12 04:55 am UTC (link)
Amen.

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(no subject) - [info]beacon80, 2009-02-12 09:12 am UTC
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[info]midoriri
2009-02-12 04:58 am UTC (link)
a black, tight, sleeveless shirt that had the words Bad ass above a picture of a angle with black wings and fangs

One question...
90 degrees or 45?

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[info]lostmustard
2009-02-12 05:11 am UTC (link)
I went with 45. (see below)

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(no subject) - [info]rowenaraven13, 2009-02-12 05:13 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]im_weird_people, 2009-02-12 07:29 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]r05km, 2009-02-19 12:07 am UTC
(no subject) - [info]little_masaouki, 2009-02-12 09:27 am UTC
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[info]rowenaraven13
2009-02-12 04:58 am UTC (link)
AN: Should the other pairings be Kuro/Draco and Harry/Blaise (Blaise as a boy) or should it be a three-way romance Kuro/Draco/Harry?

Blaise as a boy? As opposed to what?! He's not androgynous, you frigwit!

God.

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[info]liketwilight_xo
2009-02-12 05:06 am UTC (link)
remember way back in the years of yore, when people weren't sure about Blaise's gender? I suppose this Suethor has conveniently forgotten that Jo cleared that up eventually, and some still feel the need to decide? Hm.

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(no subject) - [info]rowenaraven13, 2009-02-12 05:15 am UTC
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[info]midoriri
2009-02-12 05:02 am UTC (link)
Kuro then waved her had and a small section of table appeared between the Slytherin and Gryffindor tables at the opposite end of the hall from the head table. She waived her hand again and a black throne like chair appeared there.

Arrogant little snot.

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[info]fl_brightside
2009-02-12 05:03 am UTC (link)
And also, how do you get "black hair so dark it looked like it had blue highlights"? Wouldn't hair have to look lighter to look like it had blue highlights? o_O

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[info]liketwilight_xo
2009-02-12 05:09 am UTC (link)
You would think...

but I think what she's trying to say is how some types of black hair look tinted blue in the light?

I couldn't find a good photo to illustrate, sorry. D: I know my description is terrible!

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(no subject) - [info]lostmustard, 2009-02-12 05:10 am UTC
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[info]lostmustard
2009-02-12 05:09 am UTC (link)
a picture of a angle with black wings and fangs

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BADASS!

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[info]rowenaraven13
2009-02-12 05:19 am UTC (link)
had the words Bad ass above a picture of a angle

Just trying to make mine look better. :o) Did Paint give you the same warning? That saving it to GIF might cause you to lose some color information? I found that amusing.

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(no subject) - [info]lostmustard, 2009-02-12 05:21 am UTC
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[info]ryttu3k
2009-02-12 05:12 am UTC (link)
a black, tight, sleeveless shirt that had the words Bad ass above a picture of a angle with black wings and fangs

Acute or obtuse?

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[info]rowenaraven13
2009-02-12 05:19 am UTC (link)
Acute or obtuse?

The Suethor or the angle?

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(no subject) - [info]liketwilight_xo, 2009-02-12 05:23 am UTC

(Anonymous)
2009-02-12 05:25 am UTC (link)
What a load of crap.

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[info]rodentfanatic
2009-02-12 05:38 am UTC (link)
If you need your shirt to let others know you're a bad ass, you probably aren't one. What, exactly, is "Kocho" supposed to mean?

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[info]corvae_regina
2009-02-12 06:21 am UTC (link)
I think the suethor meant Kouchou, which means headmaster or principle. As it is now, without the long vowels, it doesn't mean anything. Unless of course the last 'o' is long in which case she meant butterfly... which would actually be rather clever... so I'm guessing the suethor meant headmaster.

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[info]wineandwenches
2009-02-12 05:47 am UTC (link)
"thin but as she walked you could see the muscles moving across her body"

Who does she think she is, Madonna?

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[info]little_masaouki
2009-02-12 09:39 am UTC (link)
Don't muscles usually stay in one place? That would look creepy if they suddenly migrated across your body

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[info]catsrae
2009-02-12 06:04 am UTC (link)
soft, but strong voice

Um... How does that work? How can a voice be 'strong' in the first place? Forceful and firm make sense, but not strong.

Kuro chuckled 'kids are so funny now a days. Have to remember I’m supposed to be sixteen so I have to act like them. Damn.' Kuro then waved her had and a small section of table appeared between the Slytherin and Gryffindor tables at the opposite end of the hall from the head table. She waived her hand again and a black throne like chair appeared there.

Excuse me, but I'm pretty sure 16-year-old Hogwarts students don't randomly conjure thrones in the Great Hall... or anywhere for that matter. She fails at acting like a regular student.

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[info]choclytgremlins
2009-02-12 06:42 am UTC (link)
I saw the fangirl Japanese and decided it sucked.

That is all.

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[info]kiyuu
2009-02-12 06:50 am UTC (link)
.... I'm picturing Chikane Himemiya dressed like this Sue because of the whole. Blue eyes/long blackish blue hair thing. FUCK.

I'm going to go cry myself to sleep over this mental image now. Why, Suethor. Why.

Edited at 2009-02-12 06:50 am UTC

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[info]laciemn
2009-02-12 07:24 am UTC (link)

'Lets just say there’s more to me than there seems and all will be revealed later.'


I am so interested.

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[info]bunnyinthemoon
2009-02-12 07:39 am UTC (link)
AREN'T YOU JUST SO EXCITED TO LEARN MORE ABOUT THIS INTERESTING AND UNIQUE CHARACTER!?

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[info]bluealoe
2009-02-12 07:49 am UTC (link)
Man, that Sorting Hat is a wimp.

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[info]heartstart
2009-02-12 09:30 am UTC (link)
Exactly what I was thinking. Since when did the Sorting Hat let itself be bossed around?

Sues who get sorted into multiple houses because they are soooo special really annoy me...

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(no subject) - [info]beacon80, 2009-02-12 09:46 am UTC
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(Anonymous)
2009-02-12 08:23 am UTC (link)
LOL

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[info]hello_goodbye05
2009-02-12 09:29 am UTC (link)
"she was thin but as she walked you could see the muscles moving across her body"

I would recommend she see a doctor about that. Muscles moving across your body can't be normal.

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[info]little_masaouki
2009-02-12 09:59 am UTC (link)
God, I missed the third chapter, which I think is the winner here.

Not only does Snape ignore her cheeky nature, and let's her do whatever she wants with no better reason than "Because" but the moment Draco "Teacher's Pet" Malfoy tries to do the same thing, Snape bullies him into going along.

Even if you're going to butcher's somebody's character at least try to stay consistent

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[info]beacon80
2009-02-13 01:45 am UTC (link)
Let's not forget that giving Verita Serum to someone without Ministry approval is very illegal.

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[info]iluvthecheat
2009-02-12 10:33 am UTC (link)
Fresh meat... and it "wanders so willingly into our midst."

:)

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[info]linwenilid
2009-02-12 03:48 pm UTC (link)
Icon love! XD

"You *gandered*, sir!"

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[info]frankincensy
2009-02-12 11:03 am UTC (link)
"Yeah, that's me Golden Boy, Savior, and the Boy-Who-Lived." Harry said dejectedly.

"Well I hate to break it to you but I'm not gonna treat you any differently then anyone else."


I bet Harry was shocked and horrified.

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[info]little_masaouki
2009-02-12 06:22 pm UTC (link)
Actually that was the one and only scene that I thought was well done. Harry is visually upset about being the center of attention and everybody's last hope, and is somewhat relieved when she states that she's not going to treat him special for it.

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[info]kakeochi_umai
2009-02-12 11:32 am UTC (link)
Hooooo boy.

Kuroi no Tenchi

1. "Kuro no" or "kuroi" on its own, not "kuroi no".
2. TenShi, not tenChi. Tenchi, as someone mentioned above, means something totally different.

Kuro Shihiro

I have a horrible feeling that that is supposed to be "Chihiro" and that the Suethor pronounces it as she+hero. My eye is twitching just hearing it in my head.

Miss Shihiro

Oh. Oh my. When I first saw "Kuro Shihiro" I thought that she was using the Japanese name order, last name followed by first name. Please don't tell me she thinks "Chihiro" is someone's last name. Is there any explanation for why she chose that as the character's last name? *checks* Nothing in the profile or first page and I don't think I have the strength to read the whole thing. I left a message saying "Why Shihiro?" in the reviews, because other than a mangling of the name Chihiro I really don't understand where she's coming from with that (and I can usually tell what Suethors are trying to say when they make up stupid "Japanese" names.)

'Strange’ said a voice in her head, 'there are parts of your brain I cannot get into.'

Cannot access C:/humility. File does not exist.

Fucking "KOCHO". (see my comment above.)

I have already thought of a solution to that kocho.
I wanted someone to think of a "solution to that kocho" last year, but then he demonstrated that he does not, in fact, condone the idiocy of a certain coworker of mine like I initially thought, and now we get along great. :D

The hat/tower/table thing reminded me why I usually just skim speshul Sue fics. The fucking ARROGANCE of this bitch! Shut. The. Ever. Loving. Fuck. UP!

Edited at 2009-02-12 11:40 am UTC

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From earlier...
(Anonymous)
2009-02-12 08:18 pm UTC (link)
Ah, cool. I knew the language had been mangled, just hadn't been sure how. It's been a while since I've studied Japanese. And if she was trying to spell "Chihiro"...which does sound odd as a first name...that just makes me think "Spirited Away"...and that movie's Chihiro is irrevocably AWESOME!
Thanks for the info! *bows*

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[info]darth_gojira
2009-02-12 02:35 pm UTC (link)
Dear Japan,

We're so sorry! We didn't know your culture would be so butchered. You deserve some blame, especially for Invasion of the Neptune Men and for introducing yaoi, shota, futunari, bukakke, and tentacle rape to impressionable young hormonal teens, but this is just awful.

Sincerely and with deepest apologies
The United States (sorry about the massacres in our war together, but hey, you committed atrocities, we committed atrocities, so it's all in good fun, right?)

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[info]rakugo_report
2009-02-12 03:29 pm UTC (link)
XD

ilu instantly.

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