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4050: The Midnight Moon - Haruhi Fjioka/Harry Potter
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TITLE: The Midnight Moon
PERPETRATOR: sisterdeath1
SUE-O-METER: Awful
COVER/BANNER ART:
SUMMARY:”Haruhi and his twin sister are not what they appear. What will the Host Club do when they meet them and discover their world? Ouran High School Host Club/Harry Potter/Avengers Tamaki, Ron, Hermione, Molly, Dumbledore bashing Twins Hitachiin; twins Haru/Haruhi English underlined Japanese normal”
FULL NAME: Haruhi Fujioka/(see future note)
SPECIES: Um….
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: Haruhi gets in trouble by breaking an expensive item like in the original series. Second chapter, very confusing. Third through eleventh – just the second chapter repeated, and never gets to the Hary Potter stuff. Except… I finally got the connection because of a review. Haruhi and Harry are supposed to be the same character. (Face palms…)
ORIGIN: So, what I think is going on is this. The writer wanted to take Haruhi’s character and make her a real boy instead of a girl crossdressing as a boy, but because they couldn’t quite reconcile that fact, Haruhi suddenly also has a female twin who is there at the beginning of the story, but then disappears because she is in a different class and the writer couldn’t be bothered to give her a name. So, it might as well just be Haruhi moved to another class, yet this guy is also supposed to be Haruhi. But makybe she’s this Ranka person?
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Uh…

NOTES: So, when you post something online, you really should make sure that what you’ve written is clear and concise. Other writers shouldn’t have to decipher what you’re trying to do for other readers. Also, don’t have two characters with the same name running around unless it is a senior and junior, or two canon characters from two different fandoms.


SAMPLE:

Haruhi stood in front of the gate of Ouran High School. He looked down at his twin who was holding his hand. They had finally made it! Their mother would be so proud!

"Nii-chan, are we going in?"

"Hai. Are you sure you want to come with me?"

"I'm going to go to school with you and nothing will change that, you promised."

"I know, but I wanted to be sure you were ready. Let's go."

Hand in hand they walked through the gate and into the school, until they reached the headmaster's office.

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