Potter Sue of the Day
24 May 2012 @ 08:49 pm
Here is the fifth day, only two more days to go after this.

TITLE: The Planter's Daughter Three guesses who she's the daughter of...
PERPETRATOR: Kelsey Short
SUE-O-METER: AWFUL (awful)

FULL NAME: Serenity Longbottom
SPECIES: with
HAIR: dirty blond
EYES: brownish
MARKINGS: Serenity... http://i1081.photobucket.com/albums/j348/luvluv08/ace903f31c8a21d2fd66c6dc3d75938e.jpg James... http://3c.img.v4.skyrock.net/3c0/mister-hayden/pics/2921554089_1_5.jpg Scorpius... http://pu.i.wp.pl/k,NDEyMDk4OTUsNDUzMjMxMDI=,f,scorpius-malfoy.jpg Albus... http://i55.tinypic.com/9kmamq.png
POSSESSIONS: an owl
CONNECTION TO CANON: She is worrying that they made a mistake and she isn't supposed to be a prefect. She flashes back to some bet about which owl was stronger and James lost because he was stupid and put to much weight onto his owl... an entire bag of rocks... sure... She and James are supposed to be best friends. Third chapter she randomly runs into someone named Tom Riddle. I'm also assuming that she is supposed to be paired with Scorpius.
ORIGIN: She is Neville Longbottom's daughter who was laughed at as a child because she had a weird name. Yes... Serenity is supposed to be a weird name. The fact she's a professor's daughter or her last name is a more likely target, and she does mention she was ridiculed her first year because of that, but it takes a back seat to her being teased about her first name. She's a Slytherin too.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She is a prefect her fifth year. The ability to be like Bella Swan. (Poor, poor Neville...)

NOTES: Every chapter is labeled that is from Serenities POV. I'm also under the destinct impression the author isn't really planning out where she is going or anything for that matter. And yes... it really is Tom Riddle showing up in her story. *sigh* I was kind of hoping for a Toxic level fic where the subject matter of Tom Riddle showing up in the Next Generation fic series crops up. But no... the writing just... doesn't have much substance to it. At least not the kind I would expect from the subject matter... maybe that is a good thing?

While we laugh at the name because it is an over used Mary Sue name, there is nothing about the name Serenity that would cause other kids to laugh at her. )
 
 
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Potter Sue of the Day
23 May 2012 @ 09:48 pm
Here is the forth day of James Potter II week.

TITLE: the gardener
PERPETRATOR: ThePaperBagPrincess
SUE-O-METER:BAD (bad)

FULL NAME: Lorcan Scamander (female)
SPECIES: witch
HAIR: not described
EYES: not described
MARKINGS: not described
POSSESSIONS: none
CONNECTION TO CANON: A very boring fic with lack of character development where this “female Lorcan” is paired with James.
ORIGIN: Instead of having twin boys, Luna has at leas one girl.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: None

NOTES: I know that billyvmom requested the author write Lorcan as a female, but just because someone requests something... that doesn't mean you necessarily should do it. Since Lorcan isn't a male, then the fic isn't slash. Except... the only reason these two changed the gender of Lorcan is so that they could have a het pairing. Nice... not.

Boring... )
 
 
Potter Sue of the Day
22 May 2012 @ 02:44 pm
Here is the third day of James Potter II week. That said, the next week I am planning on doing is Rose's week. To try and make things a little more interesting, despite the fact I do in fact have a list ready to go for her, I'm thinking of having the minions find fics and send them in for that week. This way maybe I won't get a week as dull as this one is turning out to be. It's got to be via LJ PM though and let me know if you want to be anonymous or identified. Also, do you guys want one or two “other” weeks between the NG weeks?

TITLE: Lucy Cartridge and Cyrstal Chalice
PERPETRATOR: Rosiegirl52
SUE-O-METER: BAD (bad)

FULL NAME: Lucy Cartridge
SPECIES: witch
HAIR: na
EYES: na
MARKINGS: na
POSSESSIONS: a new kitten named Ella and previously a hamster named Yellow.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Ron and Harry show up after the transfer letter to take her. She meets Rose and Hermione. And then she rides the train. Pairings are Scorpius/Rose and Lucy/James.
ORIGIN: She was attending the Petersons and is randomly told she is being transferred to Hogwarts She is not from England.
SPECIAL ABILITIES:

NOTES: This is not how the exchange student program works.

... )
 
 
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Potter Sue of the Day
21 May 2012 @ 08:16 pm
Here is day two of James Week of the Next Generation Week.

TITLE: Cheater, Cheater, Pumpkin Eater
PERPETRATOR: DarkHairedVeela
SUE-O-METER: BAD (bad)

FULL NAME: Marina Rexroth
SPECIES: witch
HAIR: not described
EYES: not described
MARKINGS: none
POSSESSIONS: a piece of parchment she's doodling on at the end of the second chapter, all her thoughts on James.
CONNECTION TO CANON: The Sue throws a tantrum because James cheated on her and he brings up the fact that she cheated on him two years ago. She tells him, “You can't pull that card every time you fuck up James.” Chapter two is about Marina saying that Rose Weasly isn't really best friends but someone named Dominique. She's then complains about a character named Tony Garner and she says something about James being her ex boyfriend. Anyways, ony tells her that she is in an abusive relationship when James was trying to protect himself. Though why anyone who is protecting themselves would grab for the neck I don't know. I think the Suethor wanted more drama despite the fact this feat would be very physically impossible.
ORIGIN: She is a new generation Hogwarts student who met James their first year.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: A very nasty attitude.

NOTES: When you treat your boyfriend like an object rather then a person who you can have a conversation to reconcile ones differences with, when he's cheated and you're beating him up I think it is fully within the realm of logic for him to bring up you cheating a couple of years ago.

Humans will never have 75% oil... )
 
 
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Potter Sue of the Day
20 May 2012 @ 04:23 pm
First, here is the first day of the next Next Generation week. This week is for James Potter II. I'm also going to remind the minions not to link the Suethor back to the entries. Someone linked a Suethor from a couple days ago back and thankfully that went well. I don't know if it was our typical troll or not. If it is a new person

TITLE: We've All Got Some Secrets
PERPETRATOR: gmenon1
SUE-O-METER: BAD (bad)

FULL NAME: Evelyn “Eve” Martin
SPECIES: American witch
HAIR: It is from first person point of view... there was a lack of description.
EYES: See above.
MARKINGS: The Sue is sixteen.
POSSESSIONS: A cat named Lou. He has “brilliant blue eyes”.
CONNECTION TO CANON: A random witch shows up rather then a Muggle police officer. She is going to be placed into the foster system because of this random drug bust. And by random, I mean random. She is suddenly transferred to Hogwarts because moving her to a new country would mean a fresh start. She meets Rose Weasly who is in fifth year. She's also in the foster care of Neville Longbottom and his wife Hannah. Third chapter it switches to Rose's point of view and Rose is running late. She and Scorpius are both prefects. This adds nothing to Eve's story. She is sorted into Gryffindor.
ORIGIN: Her mother is a drug user. She attends the Salem Institute. They eat dinner. She gets mail from Hannah and she writes to her mom. For some reason she is wanting to write “Hogwarts is horrible” despite the fact there is nothing to justify saying such things quite yet. Sixth chapter she heres James getting upset because one of their friends was found bloodied in a closet. Chapter seven is entitled Liquored Up and Talking Freely.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Her background and place she came from plays no real role I can see in the fic except to give her character flavor.

NOTES: Nothing much

The first chapter starts off overly angsty, but the description of the mother was realistic. And then we got something less realistic. )
 
 
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Potter Sue of the Day
19 May 2012 @ 08:09 pm
Thanks to the anonymous minion who sent in this Mary Sue and the help they've provided. I still think the fic is confusing, but not because of not knowing about the Touhou Project which this is crossed over with.

TITLE: Sanguine Spirits
PERPETRATOR: Luminous Beginnings
SUE-O-METER: AWFUL (awful)

FULL NAME: Sirius Black, Merlin Prismriver
SPECIES: poltergeist
HAIR: Merlin's hair is a blueish silver.
EYES: The pictures I've found of her doesn't make it very clear... nothing is described in this fic and this is despite the fact we're told everything.
MARKINGS: Nothing that I can think of.
POSSESSIONS: I couldn't care.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Sirius, Merlin and Harry drive the Dursley family nuts while Hermione is worrying about doing research into Sirius claim of him being a poltergeist. Hermione goes to visit and is tackled by Sirius. Merlin is from Hermione's point of view flirting with Harry. Harry easily accepts Merlin's presence and for some strange reason they are going (Sirius in dog form) with them to Hogwarts. There really is no point to this fic and the author admits it at the end of chapter four.
ORIGIN: Sirius meets Merlin on the other side of the veil and they come back to help Harry Potter.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: The ability to confuse everyone, including Hermione Granger. Siriusis a more powerful poltergeist then Peeves. Sorry, but I can't call him a poltergeist because he doesn't match up with HP's canon here. Maybe what it is being crossed over with, but not HP's canon. Oh, and apparently Merlin can play a trumpet without touching it. I got that from the Touhou Project wiki.

NOTES: The author's notes are obnoxious.

The fic is Godmoded from the start )
 
 
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Potter Sue of the Day
18 May 2012 @ 09:11 pm
There was a review that stood out on yesterdays Sue report. The reviewer says this, “Phew! Ok so I sent you a PM cause we have similar stories BUT we don't. While both of our stories have twins and the twin being Emily/Emilie, mine is much different that yours! Ok, I'm not freaking out thinking that everyone or you thinks I stole your idea because we have two completely different stories!”

TITLE: Missing the Mark
PERPETRATOR: CrazilyObsessed
SUE-O-METER:AWFUL (awful)

FULL NAME: Emilie “Potter”
SPECIES: witch, sorcerer
HAIR: black hair
EYES: green eyes
MARKINGS: none
POSSESSIONS: a golden locket.. “ The locket was heart shaped, somewhat thick, and about the size of a quarter. On the front was an intricate design going around a rim and four people's initials were engraved in cursive; L.E.P., J.P., H.J.P., and E.R.P. On the back was a small clock with a small ruby in the center.” She is unable to open it.
CONNECTION TO CANON: For some strange reason Harry's twin sister ends up in an orphanage all the way in New York. She has no last name despite the fact the people in charge of the system would have given her a name. Albus Dumbledore and Snape show up and don't five her a letter to Hogwarts, but a school called the Ballard Institute. The school is for “Remote Developing Sorcerers”. Snape takes her all the way to Diagon Alley. She then goes back to New York and she will be taking the subway to school. Except they don't go to the subway, they go to the train station at Kings Cross. Cedric notices her and they instantly know who each other is. Apparently the met during her first visit to Diagon Alley at the ice creame shop, an event that was skipped. She's transferred from the other school and is now supposed to be a third hear. She makes friends with a Hannah Stroud and Luna Lovegood. Hannah's supposed to be the “Dimmest Ravenclaw” says Luna. She has a similar experience to Harry Potter and hears screams. Cedric meets up with her after the fact. She decides to be in Slytherin so she can be around Snape, rather then Cedric or the two friends she made on the train and thus gets sorted into Slytherin. Her blood status is of course asked. She doesn't fit in, and then eventually she runs into the trio and is taken to the hospital wing because she got hurt because she got near the whomping willow and had to be taken to the infirmary.
ORIGIN: She is Harry's twin sister.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She's a sorcerer, because the American school teaches sorcerers.

NOTES: I don't think this is really going anywhere. Well, meeting Cedric was thrown in at the spur of the moment for the second chapter, so yeah. Pretty much that.

Compared to yesterdays, this is very original. )
 
 
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Potter Sue of the Day
17 May 2012 @ 03:49 pm
TITLE: The Potter Twins and the Philisophers Stone
PERPETRATOR: GryffindorGirl347
SUE-O-METER:TOXIC (toxic)

FULL NAME: Emily Potter
SPECIES: witch
HAIR: unknown
EYES: unknown
MARKINGS: A scar on her forehead
POSSESSIONS: A phoenix core wand
CONNECTION TO CANON: It follows the plot line of Harry Potter, making very few changes to the storyline. One change is that after the zoo insident Vernon threatens no meals for a week. Because the storyline is basically plagiarized, the dialog remains the same despite the fact it should change. For example, Hagrid says “Here we go, this is Harry's key.” When he should have said, “Here we go, this is Harry and Emily's key.” or “Here we go, this is the key to the Potter family vault.”
ORIGIN: She is Harry Potter's twin sister. Chapter four has Emily helping Hermione find Neville's toad and have a run in with Draco. She's the one to find it and give it back to Neville. I'm not sure if the Suethor indents on character bashing Draco in this fic series. She gets the same storyline as Harry does with the hat... and I really have to end here. And yet I didn't... one of the reviews pointed me to the fact Emily usurps Harry and Hermione in potions class. All right, anyone else want to look through the fic?
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She takes over.

NOTES: This fic series covers the first four years. I wonder how much is copied from the actual books/movies.

Copying the original storyline is not cute )
 
 
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Potter Sue of the Day
16 May 2012 @ 11:02 pm
TITLE: Hermione's Talent
PERPETRATOR: hottopicgirl
SUE-O-METER:TOXIC (toxic)

FULL NAME: Dumbeldore, Hermione Granger, Draco Malfoy
SPECIES: wizard, witch
HAIR: I hope like canon
EYES: I hope like canon
MARKINGS: I hope like canon
POSSESSIONS: A microphone. I don't really want to know what else.
CONNECTION TO CANON: To quote the summary, “Dumbledore asks Hermione to sing for the dance, not sure what people will thing of her singing she picks muggle songs to make people see that muggles can be as productive as purebloods.” You'd think this story would only be a chapter long, maybe five at the most. It is actually twenty. Pluse it has a sequel that really sounds like it should be a part of the first fic that is twenty-sevent chapters long. The chapters on the first fic average under 750 words in length while the second averages under 500 words. And the truth is the number is smaller because there is tons of songs. Glancing at the reviews rape is involved as is character bashing of Ron. I didn't want to read past the first chapter. I won't go with Draco's characterization in the first chapter.
ORIGIN: Hermione's been replaced with Hannah Montana. Except the storyline isn't very PG
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She sings instead of using intelligent to prove her point that Muggleborn are just as good as Purebloods.

NOTES: It is bad when the summary and the first two paragraphs are very telling about the fanfic.

The first paragraph is Dumbledore, the second is Granger. )
 
 
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Potter Sue of the Day
15 May 2012 @ 05:37 pm
First, yesterday's event went well. Second, I've updated the faqs. Let me know if I could word something better. Third, does a known minion know the Touhou Project well? I had a fanfic sent in by an anonymous minion. I thought looking at the wiki for said entry would be enough, but I still can't make heads or tails of it.

TITLE: A new year which means A new look
PERPETRATOR: DM-greyeyes-sexiness-XOXO
SUE-O-METER:BAD (bad)

FULL NAME: Hermione Granger, Story Joyce
SPECIES: witch
HAIR: originally bushy, “My hair is now tamed and it passes my shoulder a little bit. It's curly and I brighten the color. So instead of a dull brown, it's now a bright, little bit darker brown. Underneath my hair is a shiny black, and some of it is also on the top of my head (Just imaging her hair roots is black, and since her hair grew it's on the top. But it isn't much. If you don't get what I'm talking about, then click on the link at the end of this chapter).”
EYES: originally brown, “I finally had gotten my eyebrows done. They're thinner but not too thin. And I have some eye make-up on. It's a nice smoky brown with some top and bottom eye liner. Since my eyes are round I didn't put a design at the end of the eye. Plus it would look too much because eye liner is on top and bottom. I also have a light pink of blush on top of my cheek bones so it can highlight my eyes. And some nude lip gloss that taste like oranges.”
MARKINGS: none at first, she is rather plane, an ugly ass Christimas sweater that her mother got her and is now complaining about being ugly
POSSESSIONS: apple computer, a face book account, Ginny has her own owl despite the fact the Weasly family can't afford stuff like this. “I'm wearing a black tee-shirt with a long baggy vest, color grey, that has black buttons and starts buttoning at the mid of my stomach and ends at the top of my thighs. My pants are tight and the color grey. It have some holes, thread hanging out, and holes that still have some thread in it. I have a long heart shaped necklace that hangs to my mid stomach. And I'm wearing a black watch that has diamonds on it, on my right wrist, and a bracelet with hot pink studs on my left wrist. I have some leather black boots that goes up from my ankle 3 inches. And has a sliver buckle with a circle on it.” And... “I looked at my nails, they're French tips. The part where it's supposed to be clear has a little color of pink. And there's a cute design on my thumbs with some gems.” Let's just say there is more and Hot Topic is involved.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Hermione has a flash back of Ginny telling her to break up with Ron. Her mom complains about her lack of wardrobe. Hermione realizes she hasn't done the maintenance she used to normally do every three to six months. Her mother and she go on a trip that the Suethor lets the readers know that she skips and to where she is getting her trunk ready. They buy so much her mother's bags get stuck in the doors at the mall and her mother tells her how hawt she is. Third chapter is a link to her hair style. The forth chapter is more self-centeredness.
ORIGIN: Ron is a bad boyfriend and his sister Ginny agrees .She gets a letter from Ginny again berating Ron. She walks past a random blond and they have a stereotypical girly conversation.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Hermione drinks a lot of orange juice because the Suethor loves it. Hermione actually cares about her looks.

NOTES: Three guesses who Hermione is going to be paired with. Also, on top of the fact we have a fourteen to fifteen year old planing on writing smut for their fic we have a Suethor who needs a lecture about internet safety. Particularly in light of the reason I've updated the faqs. And no... I didn't intentionally go and find a Suethor whose posted personal stuff to her profile. It just happened.

*giggle*! )