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Since Pottersues is getting a lot of new minions I decided it was time to draw up the basic rules for this journal that have pretty much gone unsaid among the minions. I'll also note here that there have been four Pottersues so far since the journal was started.

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3383: Casual Affair - Hermione and Draco
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The next story on my list is a Draco/Hermione which really doesn't stand out.

TITLE: Casual Affair
PERPETRATOR: MadameMalfoy21 (She unfortunately posted four stories the day I created my “Just In” list, and this is the third.
SUE-O-METER:BAD (bad)
COVER/BANNER ART:
SUMMARY:”Hermione and Draco meet in the Room of Requirement. Dramione lemon/PWP. Mature Audiences ONLY.”
FULL NAME: Hermione, Draco
SPECIES: horny Hogwartians
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: Draco and Hermione decide to do it.
ORIGIN: If the writer could have given some background as to why the two aren't hating each other, I might have given this one a better rating.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: The two canon characters are horny.

NOTES: Sadly we have another work which doesn't belong on the site. Truth be told a lot of the stories posted in the Just In are rule breakers, so I expect a lot of the stories to end up disapearing. I'll give the writer credit on this one and say it's better then the other two I featured, and I was surprised that it was. Language is still a little childish, and said story still doesn't belong on the site.

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3382: It Takes A Village; It Takes Patience - Harry James Potter-Mc-Gonagall-Snape
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TITLE: It Takes A Village, and It Takes Patience
PERPETRATOR: Savoren
SUE-O-METER: TOXIC (toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: The first cover is of Snape and Harry. The second is just of Harry. Both use clips from the movies, and the splash the titles over the clips.
SUMMARY:”This is a Severitus with a twist. Albus decides to remove Harry from the Dursely's guardianship and place him under the care of the Hogwarts staff. Warnings: OOC, AU, Corporal Punishment, Angst, Foul language, and Drug use, rape.”, and ”Sequel to It Takes A Village! Follow Harry James Potter-McGonagall-Snape as he enters his sixth year at Hogwarts. Trouble seems to follow him everywhere but he will quickly learn that his family will always have his back. Warnings: CP, AU, OOC, fluff, sexual relations, abusive relationship, angst, and death of a character. Pairings: Harry/Hermione and Ron/Seamus.”
FULL NAME: Harry James Potter-McGonagall-Snape.
SPECIES: A character the writer admits is an OC. Snape's his father, Albus is his grandfather, McGonagall his... do I really want to know?
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: The first chapter finds Snape confronting Harry. Apparently Harry's been smoking and drinking, and this earns him a lecture from the writer. I don't appreciate this original fiction novel mascaraing as a Harry Potter fanfic, because that is how the story is reading. I tried reading past the first chapter, but the fact the story reads so horribly like original fiction makes it so I can't. Thus I'm switching to the reviews. A review for chapter one reads, “This story is getting scattered. At the beginning of chapter 1, you state that Harry was not abused by his aunt and uncle, but his memories in the last chapter revealed abuse. […] A few chapters ago, Charles gives Severus and Minerva a list of punishments that they should use as opposed to corporal punishment, but here they are still smacking him. Who spanks a 15 year old, especially one that's been abused? [...] I do like the dynamic of the family that you have built in this story, but I would love to see a few chapters on Harry being grounded like a normal teenager and him struggling with it. He was grounded early on in the story, but then it was lifted for whatever reason. Maybe Harry losing his broom or being grounded to home once school starts would get through to him?”ORIGIN: “A/N: I hope you enjoy this story. I got tired of not having any more Severitus stories to read (seeing how all the writers randomly stopped) and so decided I was just going to start my own. […] A few notes that might help: Harry was not abused by his aunt and uncle. […] This is very OOC and will definitely contain corporal punishment – if this is a problem I advise you to not continue reading.”
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Dumbledore decides to take Harry out of the care of the Dursley family despite the fact he's not being abused by his aunt and uncle. The writer also admits that the characters are out of character, so in reality we have OCs mascaraing as canon characters. As soon as I went to check the reviews I found this for chapter nine.. “Thank you for your hard work and I have to say that your writing is a pleasure to read. However, I cannot read more of this story and this for two reasons. […] First: is Harry stupid? Seriously, at fifteen, I knew when to stop and how to go around to avoid punishment. Plus, his personnality doesn't really go along with the treatment he had at the Dursley's... […] Second: The punishment are way too hard. Grounded, isolated, obliged to do stupid chores and in front of the entire class: it's called humiliation. I feel really bad for Harry, seriously, it's like torture!
So once again, thank you for your beautiful writing but I think the story is unhealthy.. “ I found this one for chapter fourteen. “Okay, so I was really enjoying this story until now. […] I just cannot fathom the combination of the reactions of this Harry (who I absolutely loathe) with the reactions of a 7 year old. It has gotten too complicated.” A review for chapter thirty-five indicates mpreg.

NOTES: I typically expect a story to have earned the toxic rating when I see any mention of Severitus in the summary or author's notes. I think the reason many of the Severitus writers stop writing is because they either grow out of fanfiction, or they grow as writers.

I keep reading the warning regarding the characters being OoC and keep thinking what the writer is really saying is, “this story contains really bad writing because I don't care, and if this is a problem for you don't bother reading any further.” Perhaps though this is because of how bad the story actually is. I eventually stopped reading even the reviews because of how cringe worthy even those were.

Scratch that. I can't think of a Severitus fic which wasn't cringe worthy. I'm sure there is one which keeps the characters in character and uses good writing, but I've yet to come across one.

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3381: Remembered (series) - Grace Wilder
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Don't forget about Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. I'm also looking for some feedback on this.

TITLE: Remembered: Book One and Remembered: Book Two
PERPETRATOR: avlon.clarity
SUE-O-METER: BAD (bad) (Because there isn't ENOUGH original material to the writer!)
COVER/BANNER ART: The cover is Hogwarts castle from the movies.
SUMMARY:”Grace Wilder is starting her first year at Hogwarts and bonds instantly with Ron, Harry, and Hermione. Together, they must face mean–spirited Slytherins, baby dragons, and a secret in the heart of Hogwarts. Starting at book one with an OC.” and ”Grace Wilder survived her first year at Hogwarts. Now she must face her second, struggling to keep her abusive mother a secret, discovering strange new feelings for one of her best friends, and facing a terrifying monster. Sequel to Remembered: Book One”
FULL NAME: Grace Wilder
SPECIES: She's a poor abused Sue.
HAIR: “ Her hair was long and brown and in a French braid down her back...” Eventually a guy named Will pranks her so her hair looks like Ariel from the Little Mermaid.
EYES:
MARKINGS: “...and she had a spattering of light freckles across her pale cheeks. […] and she had a delicate nose set over a firm set mouth. A fading bruise was on her right cheekbone. […] She wasn't ordinary.”
POSSESSIONS: “In her trunk were clothes and a toothbrush, but there were also spell books and potion ingredients and a golden key to a bank vault deep underground, protected by magic, and a wand: beech with phoenix feather core, twelve and a quarter inches, reasonably supple.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: The story starts off with a bunch of angst regarding how abusive Grace's mother s and how she's able to take care of herself because her mother is such a terrible loser. She meets up with Harry and Ron and we have the train scene with very few changes. Most of the changes are places where Grace manages to steal the spotlight from the canon character or interject a philosophical thought she shouldn't yet be thinking either because she's not old enough, or the writer jumped the gun. Chapter two is the sorting hat scene. Chapter three has Grace try to protest what Snape does only for Hermione to stop her. *yawn* Chapter six is Quiditch, and I only mention this because Grace gets her hair dyed via a prank in this chapter. I'm skipping the rest of the book as all the writer is doing is copying the original storyline.
ORIGIN: “It was still better than going with her mum, who, three days ago, had screamed that Grace was abandoning her in a drunken rage then thrown a slap that threw Grace into the wall, leaving her with a bruised shoulder and the mark on her cheek. […] The only good thing about this was that Grace now had the key to her vault; her mother couldn't stop her from going to Hogwarts no matter what she did.” “She decided, right then and there, that she'd keep her family and friends separate. They didn't have to know the whole truth, and when she was seventeen, she could leave for good. She felt more at home here than she had with her mother for the past three years. She ends up in Gryffindor.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Grace is on the train for less then an hour and “..she decided, right then and there, that she'd keep her family and friends separate. They didn't have to know the whole truth, and when she was seventeen, she could leave for good. She felt more at home here than she had with her mother for the past three years...” when it took Harry a bit of time to make such a decision. Here is what the sorting hat says of her. "Ooo, kind and loyal, good, good, but ambitious, though you haven't figured out where to put all that ambition quite yet, and look at that mind. Not quite the best I've seen today, but excellent all the same. And there's plenty of courage, if only you would use it. So where do you belong?"

I found this on the writer's profile. “I write OC fanfiction and nothing else. It's what I enjoy more than everything else.” How can you know that's what you enjoy more than everything else when you've not bothered to try writing anything else? This is like saying a person only enjoys reading the Romance genre when they've never bothered trying to read something other then the Romance genre. Somebody needs to step out of their comfort zone so they'll hopefully grow as a writer.

P.S. I think the minions can guess where this one is going just as easily as I can. I normally forget to set the mood on the journal, but for this one I'm actually remembering.

NOTES: I found this author's note for the first chapter for the first book. “I've been writing it for months and months and I'm finally revealing it to everyone. I've written up to about halfway through Goblet of Fire.” What the writer means is they've copied the original story and added special bits for their OC. The only part which counts as writing are the parts unique to the writer.

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3380: Don't Let Me Go - Hermione Granger
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Don't forget about Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. I'm also looking for some feedback on this.

Number seven on my list ended up being yet another rehash of the scene between Snape and Harry. I might think the story as an ingenious piece of work, but I've read this scene in fanfiction to many times and instead found the story dull. Not really Sue material though, or worth featuring.

TITLE: Don't Let Me Go
PERPETRATOR: MadameMalfoy21 (I just realized the writer posted four one-shots on the same day, so chances are all four made it onto the Just In List of mine and will end up featured.)
SUE-O-METER: AWFUL (awful)
COVER/BANNER ART:
SUMMARY:”Hermione isn't so sure about her soon to be husband. Maybe Draco Malfoy can help her out. Dramione lemon oneshot.”
FULL NAME: Hermione Granger
SPECIES: She's a horny slut.
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: Hermione's boyfriend Ron doesn't have sex with her, so she dreams of prince charming and accidentally ends up at Draco's place and they make out with each other. They decide the wonderful sex means Draco means something to Hermione and he won't let her go.
ORIGIN: I wish to quote one of the minions here, ” I'd say this writer is fifteen at most, and this is a failed attempt to look more mature than they actually are.”
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Whether a person is meant to be together is decided in this fic by how hot the sex is.

NOTES: On the positive side the writer isn't claiming the piece is PWP when it really isn't. I wonder if they think PWP is a synonym for lemon. The writer also seems to think a good relationship is built around what kind of sex you can get out of it. The irony here is most of the time the reason we see Hermione breaking up with Ron it's because he wants sex and she doesn't, but this time it's flipped.

I myself don't mind a well written lemon so long as it's posted on the correct site, but like the above minion I quote pretty much says writing smut to try and make yourself look mature doesn't work. It actually has the exact opposite effect.

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3479: la Stella di Mare - Hermione Granger, Sarah
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Don't forget about Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. I'm also looking for some feedback on this.

The forth on my list was a poetry collection. The fifth has been deleted since I created my list and was titled “The List of Surefire Ways (Attempts) to Seduce Lily Evans”.

TITLE: la Stella di Mare
PERPETRATOR: poterheadjane
SUE-O-METER: TOXIC (toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART:There is a beautiful cover which looks like a mountain at sea.
SUMMARY:”a full month on a cruise without magic. What could go wrong?” (Why?)
FULL NAME: Hermione Granger, Sarah
SPECIES: Draco and Harry's potential love interests.
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: They're not allowed to take their wands on the cruise.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Hermione decides they need to go on a month long cruise to get “a break from the magic world” after the war. She rags on Ron for not wanting to go, but has no problems when Ginny wants to stay and help her mom out. (Double standard anybody?) Hermione and Harry talk about how Hermione doesn't deserve Ron as he said “How long is this going to take? I never even wanted to go on this stupid cruise. Hermione you check in for me and come get me when you're ready. It's the only thing you're good for.” (Is it just me or is that last line forced into the dialog to make Ron look like a git rather then being in there because it would logically follow what Ron said?) At the beginning of the second chapter Draco shows up and makes an even bigger ass of himself then Ron. (And the writer's pairing the two together?) Chapter three has Ron trying to cheat on Hermione, and then when he breaks up with her he says “Whatever. You'll come back to me when you realize no one else wants you.” She then runs off into the arms of Malfoy. On top of this a girl named Sarah shows up and takes an interest in Harry. Other random characters show up. Despite the fact it's made clear Harry is with Ginny we find Sarah still trying to get together with him and this is painted as an okay thing to do. Hermione is insisting Sarah do this. (If this didn't deserve the toxic rating then this story now does. The final chapter up so far has Harry say “She's a great girl but I can't stop thinking about Ginny.” Hermione's response is the following. “'Harry, you are my best friend so I'll be honest with you. I know you've loved Ginny for a very long time but the girl you love is gone and she won't come back. I know it's hard but you have to move on. I mean seriously it has been two years. At least give things with Sarah a go. She is an amazing girl. She is smart, funny, friendly, and beautiful. What more could you want?' There was the line I missed in chapter four, “'Don't worry he's single. But his last relationship ended pretty badly. Her brother died and she has been suffering from a depression ever since. Harry wanted to support her but she broke up with him.'” There was no mention of this before chapter four, and as such I thought Harry and Ginny were still dating. I also thought only a little bit of time passed either. As such it still feels like Hermione is getting Harry to cheat on Ginny.
ORIGIN: “A.N.: I'm sorry but there is a lot of Ron bashing in this fanfic. I got the idea for this fanfic after watching a YouTube video called 'shipping Julia'. I hope you like it.” Ron is her boyfriend at the beginning, but he's a major jerk for not wanting to go on a trip with her after one of his brothers died during the war.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: The characters aren't allowed to use music. Hermione is also running away again. Ron gets bashed for doing what amounts to the right thing because Hermione claims he's being “miserable and aggressive”. The tone is rather posh and lavish. I suspect this is the writer's dream vacation. The canon characters are pretty much canon characters in name only. The one exception is the Draco who shows up in one of the earlier chapters, but said Draco reads like first year Draco and not after the war Draco and is quickly replaced with an OC.

NOTES: In five days the writer's posted a total of eight chapters, and almost ten-thousand words for this story. I'm honestly hoping the writer's name isn't Sarah. I also find replacing jerk!Ron with jerk!Draco as a hypocritical move despite the fact the writer did choose to derail said characterization soon after.

Since we have a longer story with little to no plot progression I'm going to add the swp tag. Most of what happens is the characters lounge around doing nothing. There is no exploring the guys reactions to the Muggle world, there is no conflict besides Ron being an ass and Hermione trying to hook Harry up with Sarah. This in turn ends up horribly anti-climatic.

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3478: Like Pieces of a Puzzle Falling Into Place - Remus, Hermione, Teddy
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Don't forget about Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. I'm also looking for some feedback on this.

What am I going to do if I find a story on my “Just In” list which isn't a Mary Sue? Normally when I make lists and find the story isn't really a Mary Sue I find myself skipping over this one, but in this particular case I felt this piece is a good example of what a writer should do with plots, traits and scenarios which would normally end up leading to a Mary Sue. More explanation in the actual entry.

TITLE: Like Pieces of a Puzzle Falling Into Place (My gut reaction when I see very long titles is to ask what the writer was thinking when they picked such title. Many times the title doesn't have anything to do with the story, but is just the writer trying to make a random title which stands out. They do this by inflating the word count. In this particular case the title fits with the theme of the one-shot albiet in an abstract way.)
PERPETRATOR: articcat621
SUE-O-METER: GOOD (good) (Pottersues has featured nearly thirty-five hundred stories, and less then fifty of these stories have ever gotten this rating. It's a rating which is very hard to earn in part because I need to accidentally come across said story. It's not a story minions can send in either. In this particular case I accidently came across said story because it ended up on the Just In list when I made my Just In list.)
COVER/BANNER ART: The writer's avatar is of movie Sirius, Hermione and Remus.
SUMMARY:”When Hermione returns to Grimmauld Place after two years abroad, she didn't expect things to fall into place so quickly.” (My gut reaction to the summary involved thinking the pairing would be between Draco and Hermione. My next question was why was Hermione abroad and wondered if there would be some kind of Muggle university involved. Instead the writer had her training to be a mediwitch. I breathed a sigh of relief.)
FULL NAME: Hermione, Remus, Teddy
SPECIES: They're the canon characters. (I'm actually serious. There are no OCs disquising themselves as the canon characters. Everyone is in character.)
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: Remus has bags under his eyes.
POSSESSIONS: She has a book to read while she's there, but it never goes into which one.
CONNECTION TO CANON: The story is pretty much a cute AU one-shot where Remus doesn't die and Hermione helps pick up the pieces.
ORIGIN: The writer was writing for a challenge where they used a rare pairing, and wrote a story preferably under a thousand words, but at most twenty-five thousand.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Very few people know Tonks is dead, or that Remus was with Tonks.

NOTES: Characterization is important when writing fanfiction. When you find yourself recognizing the characters because they act like their canon selves your less likely to question such things as why Remus is alive, or why Hermione decided to become a mediwitch, or why Ron and Lavender ended up with each other, or if Remus' senses are really heightened by being a werewolf, or if that is just fanon.

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3477: The Cost - Charity and Snape
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Don't forget about Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. I'm also looking for some feedback on this.

Here is the second story I found on the just in list. The story was only five hours old at the time.


TITLE:
PERPETRATOR: thempossiblegrrl
SUE-O-METER: AWFUL (awful)
COVER/BANNER ART: The writer's avatar is an abstract of the ocean currents with sunlight streaming down.
SUMMARY:”What is the cost of bravery and courage? A character only nominally mentioned in the canon discovers that she has more of both than she could have imagined, with a little help from the man she grows to love. Just a little smut, rated M for that reason. Slightly AU, but not too off canon to really notice, since a character who is in the background never leaves many ripples.”
FULL NAME: Charity, Severus
SPECIES: According to the writer “a character only nominally mentioned in the canon”, but in reality she's the writer's OC mascarading as said character.
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: There is a prologue I doubt the story actually needed which could have instead been a part of the first chapter. The first chapter involves both Severus and Charity at separate times arguing about Severus becoming a mentor to Charity when she starts teaching. (If she's capable enough to be teaching at Hogwarts then she doesn't need babysitting.) They meet in Snape's office and for some reason start speaking about heart break because Charity knows about lily and the subject of heart break. Snape becomes a convenient tool for Charity to talk her woes to. A year later she brings up how she'll mean nothing to wizarding soicety because of the curse mark on his arm because Voldemort came back. Chapter three she's crying and using Snape's shoulder to do so. (I don't mean though in the literal sense.) It ends with Hermione reading a letter from Snape about his first and last loves because according to Hermione “...his memories only alluded to his love for Harry's Mother.”
ORIGIN: I think the summary explains a lot of the origin on this one. She used to be in a relationship with Charlie Weasley according to the writer, but Charlie was four years younger then her. The rest can be explained I think from some things mentioned on the writer's profile. “I am a newly divorced mother of two...” and “...I pretty much have had a not so adorable crush on Severus Snape since the age of 20, so most of my stories have been focused around him so far.”
SPECIAL ABILITIES: For some reason she's mentioning Quirrel when she should be mentioning Lockheart. She used to be an Unspeakable. Snape is majorly out of character in this story. (That's the mst major problem here.)

NOTES: I did give the Sue an awful rating, but I also liked knowing where this came from for the writer and the fact she had the guts to share said piece. The one thing I did not enjoy was the fact the writer obviously did not read the site guidelines before posting their story. This piece should have been seven parts instead of one.

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3476: Roomates - Hermione and Draco
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Don't forget about Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. I'm also looking for some feedback on this.

I snagged everything off the just in list. For the stories which aren't one-shots I'm going to put a guess

TITLE: Roomates
PERPETRATOR: MadameMalfoy21
SUE-O-METER: AWFUL (awful)
COVER/BANNER ART: None.
SUMMARY:”Hermione gets a new roommate, but its not what she was expecting. Dramione lemon/pwp oneshot”
FULL NAME: Hermione and Draco
SPECIES: “fuckmates”, I mean roomates.
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: Hermione and Draco decided to fuck each other despite the fact this is highly out of character for them as they hate each other.
ORIGIN: For some reason the school decided a male and female student should room with each other.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: They forgot their hate. Hermione is OCD.

NOTES: This one is a one-shot. I wonder if the writer understands what “PWP” means, because I wouldn't call the story PWP because there is an actual identifiable plot.

I also found this on the writer's profile. “Most, if not everything on this account will be fluff, smut, lemons and all that good stuff. Please please mature audiences only! If this is not your cup of tea, then please move on, but understand that it's all in good fun :) Thank you all for reading and for your feedback!”

Question: How can you ask for your stories to be read by a “mature audience only” when none of the stories posted to the site are supposed to be for “mature audiences only”?

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3475: Mystery Girl at Hogwarts - Kagome
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Don't forget about Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. I'm also looking for some feedback on this.

I went through all of the characters for the particular voice actress the week is featured around and find myself ending the week with another Kagome fanfic.


TITLE: Mystery Girl at Hogwarts
PERPETRATOR: Insane is my name
SUE-O-METER:
COVER/BANNER ART: The writer's avatar is of a girl with white hair and dual colored eyes.
SUMMARY:”Kagome was sent back to her time after the battle with Naraku with some wounds, physically and emotionally. She gets accepted to Hogwarts and the school year gets... interesting to say the less. (Srry if it's not so good first time on this crossover)”
FULL NAME: Kagome
SPECIES: shrine maiden, angst ridden teen
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: See summary. It gets to the point where Kagome get's her letter and then freaks.
ORIGIN: I believe the writer is emulating other stories they've read.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She's going to Hogwarts late, and gets her letter while in Japan.

NOTES: I think the following is a good rule of thumb for writer's to have. If you feel the need to apologize for issues in your story because it is the first time you're attempting a particular story plot line then you're likely not ready to tackle said plot line in the first place. Mind you I'm not talking about first times writing any kind of fanfic.

I honestly feel bad for the writer on this one. They received a negative review and are now not wanting to continue the story. The negative review they received wasn't criticizing them for going to Hogwarts late, or getting her letter despite living in Japan and not being registered in the book. Here is the review she got.

“The story looks interesting but the pairing won't work because Draco is a scumbag in the series, and his overall personality is like acid to someone like Kagome because Inuyasha himself would kill this guy if he met him.”

I'd like to think the writer would be continuing if they received critique on the above rather then someone criticizing them for their personal choice in pairings. I wouldn't say the pairing is one that “won't work”, but one that needs a lot of work so it will work.

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