Today's Mary Sue is provided by yemi_hikari.

TITLE: The Serpent Master The title used to include “The Power of Two” and “Book One”
PERPETRATOR: Shaun056
SUE-O-METER: (awful)

FULL NAME: Jenny and Cleo Abel, Ankaa
SPECIES: witch and wizard
HAIR: na
EYES: na
MARKINGS: na
POSSESSIONS: Jenny's wand is “Try this perhaps, Ash and Willow, Dragon Heartstring, ten and a quarter inches. Nice and springy.” Cleo's wand is “'Holly and Dragon Heartstring, eleven and three quarter inches, quite snappy.” He has a Nintendo DS he is upset to have to leave at home. Points for remembering that electronics don't work at Hogwarts
CONNECTION TO CANON: Our story opens up with them finding out the truth. Jenny is doubtful despite the fact obviously strange things happened around her and she blames it on a strong wind that obviously can't exist or explain why only one student was thrown half way across the playground. Ankaa is either Scorpius's OC mother or OC sister and Jenny gets to meet him while at Diagon Alley at least I think that is what is going on as there is no scene break. They are heading off to Hogwarts and Jenny is thinking about going to a Muggle High School. Jenny's denial about magic extends past Diagon Alley. Abel goes into Gryffindor and Jenny goes into Gryffindor after a very long chat. When someone is sorted into Slytherin the person is booed. (The teachers would not stand for such behavior and I doubt people hate Slytherin this much.) They then get a poem about a special creature that honestly shouldn't exist called The Serpent Master. We then get chapter after chapter of classes and for some strange reasons Harry shows up to help a professor with teaching the students how to duel. That's from chapter five to chapter ten. Draco is supposedly up to no good but Harry says he's gotten away from the Dark Arts. The other suspect is Erin who is a classmate at Hogwarts, but there isn't really anything going on to suspect anyone of doing something dirty. Chapter eleven is about going home for Christmas and Jenny reads the story about “The Serpent Master.” I thought about summarizing the story as it would give an idea about what kind of powers Jenny has. All I'll say is, the Suethor/Stuthor doesn't know how fairy tales work or how to properly work them into a storyline. They go back and wonder if Erin can speak parseltoungue and I've yet to find out what major thing is going on or what importance “The Serpent Master” has. More classes and chapter fourteen she is randomly picked up and told that “Today is the day, you become, The Serpent Master.” Who apparently is supposed to command this group that seems to have no purpose at all. Fifteenth chapter they force her to become a snake and try to imperio her into eating her own brother. She fights for her humanity and Draco Malfoy randomly shows up to rescue them. I am not sure what is going on at the end of that chapter, but Jenny has some sort of sway over Malfoy. And we get to the sixteenth chapter and the importance of everything is not explained. The sequel is about some special wand that is gold coming to Hogwarts.
ORIGIN: Their parents are Clara and Phillip. Her mother is a witch but never talks about it. Jenny is skeptical but Cleo thinks it is cool Apparently their mother isn't sure her kids should go to Hogwarts for no apparent reason.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: According the the second fics summary, “Jenny is The Serpent Master, a beast of ages past...” When she gets her wand she magically makes a snake appear without a spell and apparently... according to Ollivander “but only the true owner of that wand would be able to do that”. I honestly don't think so.

NOTES: I know it gets tiring to see Draco and Scorpius show up in the fics I feature but I honestly can't help the fact that a good portion of the Suethor's think they're cute. Goodness knows some of the times neither one is listed as a character either. Also, can anyone tell me what the meaning and context of this sentence is? “Jenny saw the pale man ##### up his ears.” And how about this one? “Will ###### his head 'Guess I'll have to put up with it then.'” They seem the wrong place for curse words. And “Above them ######### in the night sky was the grand castle of Hogwarts, turrets and towers sparkling down at them.” That is from the forth chapter. If something was supposed to be going on in this fic I've not got a clue.

( ... )

It's the last one!

TITLE: In The Shadows, The First Step
PERPETRATOR: Pryo and Darnet co
SUE-O-METER: (toxic)

FULL NAME: Peyton and Star Shadows, not to mention Latoya
SPECIES:
HAIR: Latoya has black hair.
EYES: Latoya has blue eyes.
MARKINGS:
POSSESSIONS: Star has the castle of luxary that is called Zenith while Peyton has poverty while she lives at the Shadow Castle. Her dad has an owl named Curuxa.
CONNECTION TO CANON: They separate the twins and escape from the castle in Scotland. Peyton and Star grow up Parent Trap style. Peyton is excited to get her Hogwarts letter. I can't tell what is happening because of the bad grammar. They then have potions and flying lessons, something about prank.s. Star is friends with Draco, Blaise and LaToya. Star decides to use her power over air to cause Neville problems. Peyton and her sister get into a fight and instead of Harry being the one to get on a broom it is Peyton. Major role stealer this Sue is. She gets the spot on the team. I can't read the later chapters, but it is pretty much Peyton taking over everything.
ORIGIN: They were born in Scottland to Artemis and Siria.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Here is the summary for the fic. “There was a second prophecy, one that fortold the tale of two twins both destined for greatness but on different sides of the wizarding war. After being split apart at birth they never knew about each other... until now. Draco/OC and Fred/OC” Their prophecey is so important it trumps the other prophecy. Someone has the power of whirling, I think Star has Pietro Maximoff's powers from X-Men Evolution and Latayo has telepathy Peyton lso steals lines from characters and claims them as her own.

The prophesy reads like this.

THE SECOND PROPHECY: TWINS OF THE SHADOWS WILL COME IN THE SEVENTH MONTH OF THE YEAR, ONE WILL BRING UTTER FEAR, THE OTHER WILL BRING ETERNAL LIGHT, AND THE DARK LORD WILL FEAR HER MIGHT, BUT SHADOWS LIE BETWEEN THE TWO, AND THE FAMILY THEY NEVER KNEW, ALONG STORMY SEAS AND STORMY NIGHTS, FIRST CAME THE STORM THEN CAME THE FLIGHT, THEIR HOME IS BEHIND, THE WORLD IS AHEAD THROUGH THE SHADOWS TO THE EDGE OF NIGHT, TILL THE STARS HAVE GONE ALIGHT, A LIGHT FROM THE SHADOWS SHALL SPRING, BUT THE OTHER SHALL BECOME THE CROWNLESS KING

NOTES: So my question is... why do we need a prophesy like this when Voldemort already fears Dumbledore and Harry Potter? Not to mention... while the prophesy sounds cool... it really doesn't mean anything.

( This makes no sense... but I didn't expect it to... )

For those who missed an earlier post, I'm working on the plans for the tenth anniversary of Pottersues. It may seem early to some of you to be start planning an event that is months away, however time does fly very fast which is why I am asking for suggestions now rather then later. This way I have less work to do when the tenth anniversary comes about. I've added a link to the entry I am using for planning so the minions can easily find it if they come up with a possible idea.

malinbe suggested a top ten or top hundred for the tenth anniversary and this is exactly why I am starting this now rather then later on. I would like the minions to suggest entries that they feel are memorable and post them to this entry. Here are the rules.

1. Each “Memorable Sue Entry” needs to be a separate post.
2. Each “Memorable Sue Entry” should have a link and an explanation by the poster as to why it is a memorable entry.
3. Each entry should only be linked to once. To make sure they are only linked to once I am going to be posting an O.K. Repeats will be frozen.
4. If you want to second a “Memorable Sue Entry”, post your answer to my “O.K.” Message. This will mean I'm the only person getting the messages for this post, unless of course you wish to say something in response to something another person has said, so long as it hasn't been said before. You can also give an additional reason why the entry is Memorable.
5. If you want to nay an entry you should also post to the “O.K.” message. Give a reason if possible as to why it is not a memorable entry.

Now, I am not sure how well this will work out or if it will work out at all. I am willing to give this a go. I was thinking of making the deadline the end of March of next year, however... I think I am going to make if February instead so I have time to compile the information gathered. Anyways, the minions help is very much appreciated with this. I have an idea how this will help me figure out the most Memorable Sues too. :D

Edit: Be sure to second the other entries by responding to my o.k. message. This way other people won't get a lot of reviews in their in boxes.

You might be thinking, but didn't Pottersues already post a Sue Post for today? Actually, I made the mistake of posting the one that was meant for today a little to early and thus yesterday ended up having two posts by mistake. I didn't notice right away, so here is todays post.

TITLE: A SPARROW OF MAGIC
PERPETRATOR: Pyro and Darnet
SUE-O-METER: (toxic)

FULL NAME:Bobby Sparrow (guess what this is crossed over with)
SPECIES: She's Jack Sparrow's little girl and she is also a witch because of who her mother is.
HAIR: na
EYES: na
MARKINGS: na
POSSESSIONS: LJ (Little Jack) is the pet she gets to take to school.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Jack Sparrow is not allowed to kill Jack because the monkey is his daughters personal alarm clock. The Sue really said it. A snowy owl shows up to deliver her Hogwarts Letter. There in is a copy of the letter. Jack decides to tell her about her mother that he met in Diagon Ally. How, when it is protected by magic and London is away from the sea I don't know. Her mother is Piper from charmed because the writer doesn't like Leo so they never got back together. She meets the Charmed group and then she's at the school taking a potions class and then broom lessons. Leo gets into an argument with someone because Bobby calls her mom “mum” instead. Anyways, she's completely replaced Harry Potter. Ron doesn't show up either, nor does Hermione Granger. But Draco Malfoy does.
ORIGIN: Well... I have to admit. Jack does run the risk of having a kid with his behavior.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Apparently Jack likes to throw Bobby out of bed in the morning. Unfortunately, it isn't thatJack

NOTES: This is the author's note on the first page. “BUT I AM GOING TO MAKE THAT PIRATES STILL GET HUNG, AND IT IS SET IN 2012! SO NO SMART ALCE BETTER POINT ANYTHING HISTORICALY WRONG MOMENTS CUZ I HAVE TOLD YOU! IF YOU DON'T LIKE DON'T READ XD- DRANET123” I only have one more story to go.

( Here is another from them. )

TITLE: VOLDEMORTS DAUGHTER DADDY DEAR
PERPETRATOR: Pyro and Darnet co
SUE-O-METER: (toxic)

FULL NAME: Maximum Riddle (Guess what other fandom the Suethors have written for?), Lexa
SPECIES: Voldemort's daughter...
HAIR: “my hair had leaves through it “
EYES:
MARKINGS: “my face had dirt splodges all over it” “ me and Draco have the same smirk it looks like we are brother and sister when we smirk.”
POSSESSIONS: “well my clothes were torn, so blood showed.” She also gets three sets of boy's uniform because she refuses to wear a skirt.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Dumbledore rescues her and she is placed in a white room. (I don't think the Suethors understand the implications those words have...) She gets to attend Hogwarts because how else would Dumbledore be able to keep an eye on her. She is placed in forth year despite the fact her magical abilities haven't been found out. She isn't sorted like the other students but is placed directly into Gryfindor. Lavender is rude to her because she's dirty and Hermione comes to her rescue. I can't read the third chapter. I just know it has something to do with her cousin's character Lexa and 'poaitions' which “was a complet and untter disacter” She also gets picked for the tournament despite the fact there is no reason for her to be picked. Breakfast then the dragon all in one chapter, getting dates and going to the Yule Ball. She takes over Hermione's line when Ron says “Max you'r a girl”. She's already got a date though. And said date is... drum roll please... Severus Snape! Actually, I am joking. I am not sure who she is dating other then the fact Lexa is dating Gorge. Wait... I think she got a date with Ron and Harry got a date with Lavendar. That explains why Hermione is her best friend and suddenly mad at her. Good grief that wasn't clear. Anyways, I am going to end this one here simply because that was a LONG fic.
ORIGIN: She is Voldemort and Bellatrix's daughter. For some strange reason Dumbledore was there when Max was born at Malfoy manner on Halloween night. (Yes... manner and not manor). Bellitrix and Sirius are for some strange reason brother and sister. (...but they are in this after all this is fan fiction PEOPLE)
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Apparently Voldemort has read a certain book series. That's how he got his daughters name. She also can swear in Spanish.

NOTES: There are things in this fic like “(LINE BRAKE CAUSE I AM COOL)”. Not cute. I'm also not sure how this is a crossover with Charmed...

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A big thanks to indigoneutrino for sending in this fic. A bit of forewarning in the fact these Suethors do not like critique. I also took a liking to their other fics, so they'll also be featured here despite the fact I don't like the fics for the reasons the Suethors want me to like their fics. Also, twilightsue is having their third Golden Sparkles Awards.

TITLE: The Original Golden Trio
PERPETRATOR: Pryo and Darnet co
SUE-O-METER: (toxic)

FULL NAME: Tomiko “Tommy” Lestrange, Alohamora Ride and Celia Moon, Aquamenti “Aqua” Lestrange. Serpentsorcia “Sorcia” Lestrange, Wingardium “Wingz” Lestrange, Leviosa “Levi” Lestrange, Nox Lextrange, Avis Lestrange
SPECIES: witches
HAIR: Tomiko has “short blond hair”
EYES: Tomiko has “bright blue eyes”
MARKINGS: Everyone thinks Tomiko is a boy. (I don't think so...)
POSSESSIONS: An ipod that the writers know Tomiko shouldn't have.
CONNECTION TO CANON: She starts the same year as the Mauraders and makes friends with every one BUT Peter. It skips to her being in third year. Sorcia and Aqua each have a kid that is the same sex as them. Actually, a lot of people just had babies the previous year. Nothing really happens but it is... just bad. There are thirteen chapters of nothing really happening. How can the Suethors call their OCs the original “Golden Trio” is beyond me. Nothing plays into them being important in the future.
ORIGIN: To quote the summary, “Harry, Ron and Hermione weren't the first golden trio, the origonal trio was Tommy Lestrange, Alohamora Ride and Celia Moon. They each have a part to play in the prophecy of Harry Potter, some more terrible than others, they just don't know it yet”
SPECIAL ABILITIES: The ability to be the original golden trio when there was never such a thing as the golden trio. Seriously... the term is a fanon term, not a canon term. That aside, Tomiko's powers include being “abnormaly strong, she could create and control electricity, she could create energy balls and she could shapeshift into anyone or anything she wanted.”

NOTES: There is a lot of caplock yelling and poor grammar.

( It has been awhile since we've had a Mary Sue like this one. )

On April 4, 2013 Pottersues is going to be celebrating its tenth anniversary. Unfortunately, this year I forgot to announce the ninth anniversary but I am hoping that won't happen next year.

First, I am wondering if anybody has noticed those countdown clocks that are sometimes used? I'd like to put one if possible on the user page of Pottersues.

Second, I would like to update “People Who Use My 'Sue of the Day' Thing with some of the newer spork journals and also add new spork communities.

Third, I am looking for ideas of things I can easily do for the tenth anniversary. One of the ideas I had was to go back to the older entries and look through the Suethor's other stories to see if they have anything that hasn't been featured before.

2012-06-01 ~ Top List Preperations ~ Suggested by malinbe

So, I am awaiting a response back from a minion and also thinking of what the in-between week will be. I have a few weeks that I found fics for but I honestly don't know if the fics are gone. That's hat happened for some of the fics I had found before and I had to find new ones.

TITLE: Tall Blonde and Annoying
PERPETRATOR: JacesVampiress97
SUE-O-METER: (bad)

FULL NAME: Saphira Blackwell
SPECIES: NYNY witch
HAIR: “ straight, ink black hair that reached her mid back”
EYES: “ bright sapphire”
MARKINGS: “On the bed was a girl that appeared to be around the age of 15 or so. “ But she is actually eighteen. I am not sure what kind of mistake this is supposed to be, whether the Suethor intends the character to look younger then she really is or if she didn't remember
POSSESSIONS: “I packed all the required items: clothes, pajamas, toiletries, books (there were quite a few as I read a lot), and my art supplies (I like to draw a little). I even packed a few of my favorite dresses because I knew that Narcissa was notorious for throwing parties. I also packed a few pairs of my favorite pairs of tennis shoes (Chuck Converse) and a few pairs of stiletto spikes. By the time I finished packing I had two suit cases, a nap sack, and my laptop carrying case. In the nap sack was my iPod and all accessories to it, along with my art supplies.” One of the songs on her ipod is “Lips like Morphine”. That's by someone named Kill Hannah. The next day she's mad because he's in her room. Her outfit when Draco wakes up in her room is “ a tank top and booty shorts”. She then wears “a pair of dark blue jean shorts, two tank tops in a layered fashion (light blue on top and white underneath), and a pair of simple light blue flip flops.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: She's made to go and stay at Malfoy manor for a few monthsDraco doesn't recognize her. For some reason Draco slept walked into her room and thinks it is his room. Her friend calls her and asks if she will get together with Draco. And then he sleeps walks into her room again. And I really can't get much out of this. It's just the typical fantasy a teenager has about an imaginary character. No thought put into an actual plot line.
ORIGIN: She was childhood acquaintances with Draco.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Apparently Draco's behavior which is considered rather normal when a guy likes a girl at that age indicates that he hates the Sue.

NOTES: The Suethor was cool enough to post her boyfriends story, which is a Gary Stu for Pokemon. Fanfiction is dominated by female writers and thus the male variety is rare. And that was the most exciting thing about this entry. Despite the fact her boyfriends story is a Gary Stu and I don't always understand what is going on I honestly like it.

( ”The )

The bad news is I had no internet yesterday and was unable to post. The good news is I found this fic today which really made my day. It isn't usual for the fics featured here.

TITLE: The Singer and the Wizard
PERPETRATOR: Luna Elizabeth Moony
SUE-O-METER: (awful)

FULL NAME: Taylor Swift (Yes... the Taylor Swift) and Draco Malfoy (awful)
SPECIES: pop star muggleborn
HAIR: Like Taylor Swift of course.
EYES: See above...
MARKINGS: See above...
POSSESSIONS: a music career
CONNECTION TO CANON: Dumbledore randomly shows up and tells her she is a witch at age sixteen. She meets Harry and company and is told to stay away from Malfoy. He has a major crush on her. “But it took all he had not to pound her face into the ground. “ (That is an actual quote form the first chapter.) She's welcomed into the Weasly family because they visit Hogsmede the same time she does on her first trip. and is sorted into Gryfindor and she makes friends with “the Golden Trio, Ginny, Luna, Katie Bell, Neville, Seamus, and the Weasley twins”
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She's able to enter Hogwarts very late in the game despite also being American. As for Draco... Dumbledore says this about him in the second chapter. “You said you know about veela's. And I might guess you already know is that a veela must have a mate before they turn 18.”

NOTES: Instead of messing up an already existing creature I wish people would do some research and find an actual creature that fits the need. And no... don't make up creatures either, unless you know what you're doing. P.S. Please be on the look out for more fics like this one minions. And no... I don't mean Draco!Veela stories... we've got plenty of those. I mean RPFs. Oh... and I kind of wish Taylor had been part Veela here. That would have made for a much better story I think. Actually, any fic that is different from what we usually get would be awesome. With the RPF's... if they're on ffnet I'll likely pause during a featured week as RPF's are against the site rule and there is a chance they'll disapear quickly too...

( I think Taylor Swift would be more doubtful about the situation. )

TITLE: Finding FAmily
PERPETRATOR: Momo McGehee
SUE-O-METER: (toxic)


FULL NAME: Lexa Marie Debany , Cissy
SPECIES:
HAIR: “Her bright red hair was nearly the same color as Teddy hair, His only being a few shades darker. They were always mistaked as siblings, Which she wished was true. Teddy always had red headed family members in and out of his house, Plus his Uncle and Aunt, harry and Ginny were always so nice to her.” Cissy has blond hair
EYES: na, Cissy has gray eyes...
MARKINGS: na
POSSESSIONS: 300$ of her own, 1000$ stolen of her non biological mother, a little tree house to live in, “6 cans of soup, 4 cans of corn, a can of olives, a can of beans, 4 cans of green beans, 4 cans of sloppy joes, 12 bottles of water, a loaf of bread, a bag of chips, a box of cookies, and the half pan of pasta she had nicked from the fridge”, no way to heat up the food or keep a pan of pasta from spoiling, school supplies despite the fact there is nothing in the fic about her going and getting said supplies.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Katie doesn't want to go to St. Mungos to deliver the baby because she was afraid they would hurt her baby. She decides instead to have the baby in a Muggle hospital. Katie dies and the nurse accidentally switched Fred and Katie's baby out for a dead one. Despite having been switched for a Muggle family she manages to live next door to the Potters and is best friends with Teddy. She gets a letter and her mom freaks out. Her mom begins to beat on her and Harry miraculously walks in on the situation and he's just allowed to leave with her. Harry then lets her live in a little tree house near the house and this is where the rating went from awful to toxic. She's worrying about making 300$ last for more more then two months. She then stills around a thousand dollars from her mom. Teddy plays the hero. They then head to Hogwarts. She meets someone named Cissy who has an invisible friend named shadow. I have a good idea who she's supposed to be with.
ORIGIN: She is the daughter of Fred and Katie. Her godmother is supposed to be Hermione.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She angst about being kicked out by her fake mom to the point it feels like a knife in her heart. She also knows at age eleven that “ her Mum was supposed to be supporting her any ways at least until she was 17”.

NOTES: The summary was one I couldn't resist. I'm also going to note, a can of sloppy joe is just the sauce, it doesn't have the meat with it.

( Here is the Sue's origins )